An article...

I was supposed to write an article which as far as I know is a part of the CAE writing.
I would be grateful if people who are knowledgeable about how to write an article would respone to my thread as I would like to know whether the structure used in the article is correct or not.

Tourism - is it good or bad for your region?
Do you think there should be lees or more tourism in your region.
What benefits does the tourist industry bring to your region?
What would be the disadvantages of increased tourism?


Tourism- if properly used, it can turn a poor village into a land of opportunities.

Regions that swarm with tourists are usually very prosperous. However, there is a general disagreement among dwellers, which derives from the fact that serious and recurrent problems are also typical of tourist resorts.

My region has never been considered a tourist destination but I think if the local council were to change its policy, the situation would improve substantially. In my neighborhood, there are fine lakes that ought to be converted into wonderful places with sand and cafes. It would lead to local residents earning more and more money. On the other hand, tourists can be a real nuisance, especially rowdy individuals who take no notice of other people drinking or throwing rubbish everywhere.

Agrotouristics is also what my region may offer. Establishing such properties would be beneficial for local industry leading to its boost and lower unemployment. Nevertheless, some people might argue it could ruin the naturalness of such land.166

Having taken a rest at a lake visitors can take a look at my area’s history monuments. The increase in their popularity is vital if they are to survive as their supervisors need money to cover the costs of maintenance. But it is worth bearing in mind that any misuse of these valuables may be disastrous because of their fragility.

To sum up , I find the improvement of my area’s attractions crucial if it wants to switch smoothly from out-of-date and costly industry like mining to new, a bit more desirable branches such as tourism.

Do you think there should be 'lees' (ortog) or more tourism in your region.

Tourism- if properly used, 'it' (wg mnie niepotr) can turn a poor village into a land of opportunities.

In my neighborhood, there are fine lakes that ought to be converted into wonderful places with 'sand and cafes' (w jaki sposob mozesz 'convert lakes into sand and cafes?).
On the other hand, tourists can be a real nuisance, especially 'rowdy individuals who take no notice of other people drinking or throwing rubbish everywhere' (przeczytaj to jeszcze raz).

'Agrotouristics' (zle slowo) is also what my region may offer.

Having taken a rest 'at' (ja bym napisala NEAR) a lake visitors can take a look at my area’s history monuments. The increase in their popularity is vital if they are to survive as their 'supervisors' (poszukaj inne slowo) need money to cover the costs of maintenance. But it is worth bearing in mind that any misuse of these 'valuables' (poszukaj inne slowo) may be disastrous because of their fragility.

To sum up , I find the improvement of my area’s attractions crucial if it wants to switch smoothly from out-of-date and costly industry like mining to new, a bit more desirable 'branches' (moze inne slowo) such as tourism.

Widzę ,że zawsze można na Panią liczyć.Dziękuje:-)

On the other hand, tourists can be a real nuisance once they also comprise rowdy individuals who destroy
environment by throwing rubbish and pose a threat to nearby residents. -czy to zdanie brzmi lepiej?

A czymożna napisać :There are fine lakes that ought to be enriched with elegant and newly furnished cafes as well as small beaches. ?

>>There are fine lakes that ought to be enriched with elegant and newly furnished cafes as well as WITH small beaches.

On the other hand, tourists can be a real nuisance 'once' IF they also comprise rowdy individuals who destroy THE environment by throwing rubbish and WHO pose a threat to nearby residents. (teraz tak)