Prosze o POMOC ! w psrawdzeniu .

Witam'
Napisałem rozprawke i mam prośbę czy mógłby ktoś ją sprawdzić ? ( wstęp i zakończenie pominąłem, głownie chodzi mi o rozwinięcie o błędy i czy to w ogóle się kupy trzyma ) Temat/ polecenie " Napisz rozprawkę ukazującą dobre i złe strony walki ze starzeniem się. Z góry dziękuję za pomoc.

1.Dayed hair, face lift it is only a few examples of things than can set you in a better mood. Moreover your body is stronger. Thanks for anti'ageing therapies you can have more acitve and independent life than your peers. Finally you can make a new challenges. For example make some interesting course or learn a new language. It is a really strong motivation not to give up.

2.On other hand, the anti-ageing battle may have a negative impact at your personality. You can start pretending to be younger than you really are but it is only an example of futile attempt to turn back time. Another argument against is waste of money. the price of youth and beauty in not lov. Expensive plastic surgery and mircale cures may trigger addiction and leads to poverty in old age. In addition you can meet with disrespect from some people. What can bring a lov self-esteem.

1. 'Dayed' (popraw) hair, face lift 'it' (dlaczego 'it' jak wymieniasz 2 rzeczy) 'is' (popraw tutaj l. mn) only a few examples of things 'than' (zle slowo) can set you in a better mood.
Thanks 'for' (zle slowo) anti'ageing therapies you can have (cos brak) more acitve and independent life than your peers. Finally you can 'make' (zle slowo) 'a' (niepotr) new challenges. For example 'make' (zle slowo) some interesting course or learn a new language. 'It' (nie wiem do czego to sie odnosi) is a really strong motivation not to give up.

2.On (cos brak) other hand, the anti-ageing battle may have a negative impact 'at' (zle slowo) your personality. You can start pretending to be younger than you really are (przecinek) but it is only an example of (cos brak) futile attempt to turn back time. Another argument against (cos brak) is waste of money. The price of youth and beauty in not 'lov' (popraw). Expensive plastic surgery and 'mircale' (ortog) cures may trigger addiction and 'leads' (popraw) to poverty in old age. In addition you can meet with disrespect from some people. 'What' (zle slowo) can bring a 'lov' (popraw) self-esteem.

Ja bym wybral inny czasownik.

obsession?

1. Dyed hair, face lift are only a few examples of things that can set you in a better mood.
Thanks to anti-ageing therapies you can have "much" (czego brakuje? ) more acitve and independent life than your peers. Finally you can 'make' (zle slowo, jakie powinno być bo nie mam pojęcia ? )new challenges. For example doing some interesting course or learn a new language.

2.On the other hand, the anti-ageing battle may have a negative impact on your personality. You can start pretending to be younger than you really are, but it is only an example of the futile attempt to turn back time. Another argument against anti-ageing battle (?) is waste of money. The price of youth and beauty in not low. Expensive plastic surgery and miracle cures may trigger addiction and lead to poverty in old age. In addition you can meet with disrespect from some people. Which (?) can bring a low self-esteem.

Terri dzieki za sprawdzenie, mam jeszcze prośbę czy teraz jest już dobrze ? ( i co powinno być w tych miejscach gdzie nie poprawiłem ? )

fui eu, a mam pytanko w tym pierwszym poście co byś wybrał zamiast set, bo się nad tym zastanawiałem ale w końcu nic nie znalazłem ?

google "you in a better mood".