opis sytuacji, w której jest się z cała rodziną

Witam, mam do napisania list, w którym mam opisac sytuacje, w ktorej jestem wraz z całą rodziną, albo z całym narodem, np. euro. Wybrałam ślub brata i prosiłabym o sprawdzenie :
My family get together when my brother had a wedding. It was on 22 September 2002. 3 months before the party we had done invitations. My brother with his fiance had handed out the invitations family and friends. Ten days before the wedding we had helped cook and decorate ballroom. Me and my siblings had blowed balons. It had been very fuuny ! We had been very stressful before party.My mum was very nervous because her first son had a wedding. I had bought beautfiful dress. Everybody was good looking.
Wedding started at 10 o'clock in church. Music was playing and everybody was waiting for bridal pair. Best man was my brother Sebastian. Bridal pair took a marriage vow. Everybody was touched. After the ceremony we went to ballroom. My family were sitting and spending a lot of time together. when we were eating dinner we remembered wedding of my cousin. Later we went dance. We sang a song about family. My brother thanked mum dad grandma and grandpa for beeing supported him. It was very touched. Everybody had a good time ! We was at home at 5 o' clock.
There was good day ! I spent a lot of time with my family. I will be pleasantly remember this day.

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My family got together when my brother had a wedding. Three months before the party we had done invitations. My brother with his girl had handed out the invitations to family and friends. Ten days before the wedding we had helped cook and decorate ballroom. Me and my siblings had blown balloons. On the wedding day the family was stressed .My mum was very nervous because her first son had a wedding.
Marriage ceremony took place in the Holy Christ Church at 10 o'clock. Music was playing and everybody was waiting for bridal pair. pair took a marriage vow. The ceremony was really touching, I cried as I usually do on so important events. After the ceremony we went to ballroom.The party after the official part was fantastic. My family sit and spent a lot of time together. when we were eating dinner we we mentioned the old times. We sang a songs about family. My brother thanked Mum and Dad for support. It was very touching. Everybody was dancing and laughing. I was in home at five o'clock.
There was good day ! I spent a lot of time with my family. I will be pleasantly remembered this day.

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My family got together when my brother had 'a' (tutaj dałabym 'his') wedding. Three months before the party 'we had done' (ujmij to inaczej) invitations.
Ten days before the wedding we 'had' (niepotr) helped (cos brak) cook and decorate (cos brak) ballroom. Me and my siblings had blown (cos brak) balloons.
Music was playing and everybody was waiting for (cos brak) bridal pair. (cos brak) pair took 'a' (tutaj na pewno jest THE) marriage vow.
I cried as I usually do on 'so' (daj slowo SUCH) important events. After the ceremony we went to (przedimek) ballroom.
My family 'sit' (zly czas) and spent a lot of time together. when we were eating dinner we 'we' (niepotr) mentioned the old times. We sang 'a' (po co 'a' przed l. mnoga?) songs about family. My brother thanked (podaj tutaj 'his') Mum and Dad for support.
I was 'in' (tutaj 'back') home at five o'clock.
'There' (zle slwoo) was good day !
I will 'be' (niepotr) 'pleasantly' (w złym miejscu) remembered this (daj tutaj pleas....)day.

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