Proszę o sprawdzenie rozprawki

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A lot of parents decides to sent, their children to ‘normal’ school; independent school or public school. But some of parents afford to teach own children at home. Homeschooling is fantastic way of teaching children so every year more and more parents decide to teach their children at home. However, the homeschooling is not bed of roses and it does have certain drawbacks.
They no to denying that homeschooling have a number of advantages. First of all, most children has a long and dangerous way to school. Sometimes one or two hours take them, to went to an school, so think that they must get up early morning and after school, they must return to home when they are very tired and hungry. Children who learn at home, not have this problem, because they stay at home. Secondly, almost all schools has, at one class, over twenty pupils. Why it is a problem? Teacher can’t pay attention all pupils and often happened that several students not understand a lesson but teacher not explained them it. Homeschooler, not have this problem. On one teacher falls one to five pupils. What is more, children who educates at home better learnt, than children at ‘normal’ school. They can choose subject which they have a good head and develop him.
Although, homeschooling have a lot of advantages, it does have some disadvantages. For example, homeschooler can distract by computer, smell that comes from a kitchen, music from brother’s room or by talkative sister in neighboring room. Another problem is that home for homeschooler, may be associated with work and studying. Apart from that, homeschooler can’t make new friends, because they learn alone or with own siblings, but this argument is not really good, because, as well as possible, parents organizes ‘homeschool co-ops’, they invites different families and organized lessons together.
To sum up it seems that homeschooling have as many advantages as negative aspects. The decision of whether to sent own children to school or teach them at home remains a matter of personal choice.


(Za dużo jest słow, ale nie o to chodzi, ważne jest dla mnie czy w ogóle coś z tego da się zrozumieć. Proszę o sprawdzenie.)

cała gramatyka do powtórzenia

oj, dużo błędów.... między innymi:
A lot of parents decides to sent their children - ,,s" dodaje się tylko do he/she/it
They no to denying that homeschooling have a number of advantages.- to w ogóle trudne do zrozumienia- chodzi o tych rodziców, Ciebie czy ogólniw? jeśli o rodziców, to powinno być: ,, They DON'T deny"
Sometimes it takes them one or two hours to go to school
so think that they must get up early morning- kto myśli? pamiętaj o pisaniu podmiotu; early in the morning
Children who learn at home, not have this problem, because they stay at home. znowu, DON"T have this problem.
Secondly, almost all schools has, at one class, over twenty pupils. zupełnie inny szyk zdania. In almost every school, there are over twenty students in one class

develop him. -> it; him tylko do osób
even though homeschooling have a lot of advantages, it does have some disadvantages. For example, homeschooler can be distracted

As a result , homeschooler can’t make new friends; ogólna rada- nie zaprzeczaj własnym argumentom w rozprawkach, w żadnym języku, a już na pewno nie tak dosłownie. można było napisać, że niektórzy rozwiązują ten problem w ten i ten sposób, ale nie, że to słaby argument :)

To sum up it seems that homeschooling have as many advantages as negative aspects. The decision whether to sent

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Agree. - Back to basics;)

Ok, dzięki wielkie za sprawdzenie biorę się za gramatykę.

]A lot of parents 'decides' (zle slowo) to 'sent' (zle slowo), their children to '‘normal’' (wytlumacz co to znaczy) school; (; - wystarczy przecinek) independent school or (cos brakuje) public school. But some 'of' (niepotr) parents (brak slowa) afford to teach (brak slowa) own children at home. Homeschooling is (brak przedimka) fantastic way of teaching children (przecinek) so every year more and more parents decide to teach their children at home. However, 'the' (niepotr) homeschooling is not (brak przedimka) bed of roses and it does have certain drawbacks.
They 'no to' (zle, DO NOT) 'denying' (zle slowo) that homeschooling 'have' (tu ma byc 3os.l.poj) a number of advantages. First of all, most children 'has' (zle slowo) a long and dangerous 'way' (daj inne slowo) to school. Sometimes 'one or two hours take them' (nie, zla kolejnosc slow, najpierw komu a pozniej ile), to 'went' (zle slowo) to 'an' (niepotr) school, so 'think' (ja? mam myslec? napisz to inaczej) that they must get up early morning and after school, they must return 'to' (niepotr) home when they are very tired and hungry. Children who learn at home, (brakuje DO) not have this problem, because they stay at home. Secondly, almost all (dalabym przedimek tu) schools 'has' (schoolS to l. mn), 'at' (zle slowo) one class, over twenty pupils. Why it 'is' (zle slowo - tutaj THIS) a problem? (brak przedimka) teacher can’t pay attention (cos brak) all pupils and (cos brak) often 'happened' (zle slowo) that several students DO not understand 'a' (ja dalabym THE) lesson (przecinek przed 'but') but (przedimek) teacher HAS not explained 'them it' (zla kolej slow i brakuje slowa) . (brak przedimka) homeschooler, DOES not have this problem. 'On' (zle slowo) one teacher falls one to five pupils. What is more, children who (brak czasownika) 'educates' (zle slowo) at home 'better learnt' (zla kol slow i zly czas), than children at ‘normal’ schoolS. They can choose (brak przedimka) subject which they 'have a good head and develop him' (cos tu nie tak, 'subject' - to nie meska postac to jest 'it').
Although, homeschooling 'have' (zle slowo) a lot of advantages, it does have some disadvantages. For example, (brak przedimka) homeschooler can (cos brak) 'distract' (zle slowo) by (brak przedimka) computer, (brak przedimka) 'smell' (moze lepiej 'arona') that comes from 'a' (zly przedimek) kitchen, music from (przedimek) brother’s room or by (przedimek) talkative sister in (przedimek) neighboring room. Another problem is that home for (przedimek) homeschooler(,) (nie potrzeba przecinka tutaj) may be associated with work and studying. Apart from that, (przedimek) homeschooler can’t make new friends, because they learn alone or with (cos brak) own siblings, but this argument is not really (przedimek) good (cos brak), because, as well as possible, parents 'organizes' (ma byc l. mn) (przedimek) ‘homeschool co-ops’, they 'invites' (invites tylko 3os.l.poj, tu masz l. mn) different families and 'organized' (zle slowo) lessons together.
To sum up (daj tu przecinek) it seems that homeschooling 'have' (zle slowo) as many advantages as negative aspects. The decision of whether to sent (cos brak) own children to school or teach them at home remains a matter of personal choice.

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