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Write your own letter of application for the following job, whch you see advertised in an English-language magazine in your country:
Language School Receptionist
Busy and expanding language school with a reputation of professional standards and friendly service requires two receptionists for its new centre in the north of England. Successfuk candidates will have a genuine interest in people and be able to work under pressure. They will also be reasonabky fluent in both spoken and written English. IT skills an advantage. Previous experence useful but not essential.

Dear Sir/Madam,

I would like to apply for the position of language school receptionist which I saw advertised in an British-life magazine.

At present I am a first year student at Faculty of Architecture at Warsaw University of Technology and I finish my academic year in June. However, I feel I still want to learn new things and I plan to go to England during next year.

The reason I am applying for a job is that I cannot afford the costs of living abroad. The job would give me opportunity to earn and save some money for my needs. I think I would be a suitable candidate for this job, because for the last three years I have been helping my father's friend in his office with answering phones from English customers or preparing documents and tables on computer so I have had experience of this kind of work. I would be able to provide references from Mr. Peter Nowak and my English certificate of C1 level. I have been also working under pressure as lifeguard during my summer internship.

I hope you will consider my application and I look forward to hearing from you in the near future.

Yours faithfully,
XYZ

I would like to apply for the position of (brak przedimka) language school receptionist which I saw advertised in 'an' (zly przedimek) British-life magazine. (wypada dac date kiedy)

At present I am a first year student at (brak przedimka) Faculty of Architecture at Warsaw University of Technology and I finish my academic year in June. However, I feel THAT I still want to learn new things and I plan to go to England during next year.

...The reason I am applying for 'a' (zle slowo) job is that I cannot afford the costs of living abroad. ... (Nie jestem za pewna czy takie personalne rzeczy powinno sie pisac w liscie - ja bym to ominela)
The job would give me (brak przedimka) opportunity to earn and save some money for my needs. (Bardzo ciekawe, ale co to ma do rzeczy - przeciez wszyscy inni tak samo moga napisac - nikogo nie obchodzi co bedziesz robila z forsa ktora zarobisz)
I think THAT I would be a suitable candidate for this job, because for the last three years I have been helping my father's friend in his office (napisz czym on sie zajmuje) with answering 'phones' (daj w calosci, slowo jest 'telephones') from English customers 'or' (daj AND) preparing documents and 'tables on computer' (co to niby jest? jak Excel tables, to tak napisz - pisz wiecej po academickim, wyzszym jezyku) so I have had experience of this kind of work.
I 'would be' (niepotr, wystarczy AM) able to provide references 'from Mr. Peter Nowak' (nie podajemy imion swoich referees w liscie) and my English certificate 'of' (zle slowo) C1 level.
I have 'been also' (zla kolejnosc slow) working under pressure as lifeguard during my summer internship (z kim? gdzie? jak dlugo? musisz to napisac).

No przeczytalam, ale nie za bardzo sie dowiedzialam DLACZEGO myslisz, ze jestes najlepsza na ten job. Napisz to wyraznie, musisz sie 'sprzedac' - z twoim doswiadczeniem, motiwacja i osiagnieciami.