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On the 22nd of June the huge charitable fair will take place in the hall of our school. During that party you will be able to buy many interesting things connected with Christmas. Those will be mainly: decorations for the Christmas tree, glass balls, toys, postcards, ceramic and jewellery. Additionaly, it is planned much more attractions. Specially for that day there will be a concert. Moreover, everyone will be able to take part in different games, contests and win some smalls gifts. On that party you will be able to buy pictures painted by the youngest children. The money that we will collect will be transfered to the poorest children in our country.
We warmly invite all interested people.

Z Góry dzieki

Wyglada dosc dobrze,ale potrzeba kilku poprawek:

>hall of our school. During that party you will be able to buy
THE albo THIS party lepiej tu pasuje

>Additionaly, it is planned much more
AdditionalLy, THERE ARE planned MANY (attractions - policzalne) more...

>attractions. Specially for that day there will be a concert
Nie mozna tlumaczyc dokladnie,trzeba czasem zmienic kolejnisc wyrazow w zdaniu:
There will be a concert ORGANIZED specially for that day.

>On that party you will be able to buy pictures
AT THE (THIS)...

>be transfered to the poorest children in our country.
be GIVEN OUT ("transfer" odnosi sie do konta a one beda po prostu przekazane dzieciom,do rak)

>AdditionalLy, THERE ARE planned MANY (attractions - policzalne)
>more...
Additionally,THERE ARE MANY MORE attractions planned. (taka kolejnosc)

Chyba:

On the 22nd of June A huge charitable fair ...

connected with -> associated with, related to, pertaining to

Many additional attractions are planned.

... win some small +prizes+.

The money +collected+ will +go+ to the poorest children in our country.

Racja-przeoczylam.(CHociaz ciezko to komus moze byc wytlumaczyc,bo niby on mowi o juz konkretnym wydarzeniu,ale jednak w takich sytuacjach slyszy sie z "a".)

Wielkie dzieki panowie :) A jeszcze to ostatnie zdanie dobrze jest napisane ???

Lepiej :
We warmly invite everyone interested.

Pakanam is a lady, dude! :•))