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czesc przetlumaczylam ponizszy tekst ale nie wiem czy dobrze. Prosze o sprawdzenie. (nie tlumczylam tego doslownie tylko zachowalam ogolny sens)
Agata, uczennica klasy maturalnej, zakochuje się w mężczyźnie starszym od niej o piętnaście lat. W dniu osiemnastych urodzin przedstawia Bartka rodzicom. Ojciec dziewczyny od początku nie akceptuje tego związku. Uważa, że trzydziestotrzyletni mężczyzna nie jest dla niej odpowiednią osobą. Agata przekonana, że to miłość na całe życie, postanawia zamieszkać z Bartkiem w jego domu w Krakowie. Informuje o swoim postanowieniu rodziców. Ci nie podzielają jej entuzjazmu. Za wszelką cenę starają się przekonać córkę, że wyprowadzka z domu pół roku przed maturą to nienajlepszy pomysł.

moje tlumacznie:

Agata is 18 years old and she has to pass the GCSE for a few months. Unfortunately she falls in love with a man who is 33 years old. Kate's father doesn't accept this relationship but his daughter wants to move out to her boyfriend's city and pass the exam there. Her parents at all cost want to convince Kate to stay at home. The young girl declares that it is love forever, that she is of age and can do what she wants. Moreover she promises that she will pass the GCSE in Krakow and then she will go to the university.
Who is right? Kate's parents who are afraid that she can destroy her life or self-cofident teenager? Should Kate's parents allowed her to move out to her boyfriend?

Agata is 18 years old and she has to pass the GCSE {in} a few months. Unfortunately she falls in love with a man who is 33 years old. Kate's father doesn't accept this relationship but his daughter wants to move out to her boyfriend's city and pass the {exams} there. Her parents at all cost want to convince Kate to stay at home. The young girl declares that it is {a} love forever, that she is of age and can do what she wants. Moreover she promises that she will pass the GCSE in Krakow and then she will go {on} to {} university.
Who is right? Kate's parents who are afraid that she can destroy her life or {the} self-cofident teenager? Should Kate's parents {allow} her to move out to her {boyfriend's}?

wielkie dzieki ale mam jeszcze dalszy ciag tej opowiesci wiec jeszcze prosze o sprawdzenie tego:)rnrndalszy ciag historii....rnrnMatka, bazując na negatywnych doświadczeniach córki przyjaciółki, stara się uchronić Agatę przed popełnieniem życiowego błędu. Starszy mężczyzna, opieka nad domem, oddalenie od rodziców, zabawa w dorosłość - to nie jest życie, jakie wyobraża sobie myśląc o przyszłości córki.rnrnmoje tlumaczenie:rnrnthe sequel of this story..rnrnKate's mother presents her as an example negative experience of a friend's daughter. Mary also fell in love with an elder man, moved out, didn't pass her exams. Then she got pregnant and her boyfriend left her beacuse he found another naive girl. Unfortunately, Kate insists that such a story will never happened to them because Tom really loves her. Parents have to invent new arguments. They try to explain her that when she takes up residence with her boyfriend she won't have time for studying. She will have too many duties - care about Tom's animals, the studies,work,shopping, cooking, cleaning, etc. It's not a game but a real life and she won't up to it.rnWhat's your opinion now? Do you agree with your first choice or do you want to change your mind?

o matko jak to sie zapisalo;/ jeszcze raz - the sequel of this story.. - Kate's mother presents her as an example negative experience of a friend's daughter. Mary also fell in love with an elder man, moved out, didn't pass her exams.Then she got pregnant and her boyfriend left her beacuse he found another naive girl. Unfortunately, Kate insists that such a story will never happened to them because Tom really loves her. Parents have to invent new arguments. They try to explain her that when she takes up residence with her boyfriend she won't have time for studying. She will have too many duties - care about Tom's animals, the studies,work,shopping, cooking, cleaning, etc. It's not a game but a real life and she won't up to it. - What's your opinion now? Do you agree with your first choice or do you want to change your mind?

Kate's mother presents her as an example {of a} negative experience {which one} of {her} friend's daughter {had}. Mary also fell in love with an elder man, moved out {and, consequently, she} didn't pass her exams. Then she got pregnant and her boyfriend left her {because} he {had}found another naive girl. Unfortunately, Kate insists that such a story will never {happen} to them because Tom really loves her. {The} parents have to {put forward} new arguments. They try to explain {to} her that when she takes up residence with her boyfriend she won't have time for studying. She will have too many duties - {the} care {of} Tom's animals, the studies, work, shopping, cooking, cleaning, etc. It's not a game but {}real life and she won't {be} up to it. What's your opinion now? Do you agree with your first choice or do you want to change your mind?

znowu dzieki:) i jeszcze mam jeden argument i dwa mozliwe zakonczenia wiec tez bardzo prosze o sprawdzenie - Kate still insist on moving out and she doesn't want to listen to any arguments. Her father is furious and he threatens her that when she leaves home they won't provide for her and the door to their house will be closed for thei daughter. The conflict with parents is growing. What in this situation should Kate do?

i teraz dwa zakonczenia: - 1. Kate moved out - Kate decided to move out from our house. She passed the GCSE but she didn't get to university. In the course of two years she called only few times and she has never visited us - till yesterday. She decided to call on because she had to tak her albums from home. She works and she wants to go on to university. She broke with Tom because he said that she owed everything to him and that he had to provide for her. She doesn't want to come back home because she is mature and independent. She promised that she will try to reconcile with father and visit us often. - 2. Kate didn't move out. She passed her GCSE but she didn't get to university. She broke with Tom because he deceived her. He is hunter not forest ranger as he sais, he doesn't like Spanish but American movies and not tennis but football. She didn't want to talk about him any more. For a few weeks she brought a new boyfriend to our house. He comes from Spain and he doesn't speak Polish . She says that it's a love of her life.

i teraz dwa zakonczenia: - 1. Kate moved out - Kate decided to move out from our house. She passed the GCSE but she didn't get to university. In the course of two years she called only few times and she has never visited us - till yesterday. She decided to call on because she had to tak her albums from home. She works and she wants to go on to university. She broke with Tom because he said that she owed everything to him and that he had to provide for her. She doesn't want to come back home because she is mature and independent. She promised that she will try to reconcile with father and visit us often. - 2. Kate didn't move out. She passed her GCSE but she didn't get to university. She broke with Tom because he deceived her. He is hunter not forest ranger as he sais, he doesn't like Spanish but American movies and not tennis but football. She didn't want to talk about him any more. For a few weeks she brought a new boyfriend to our house. He comes from Spain and he doesn't speak Polish . She says that it's a love of her life.

kurcze teraz sie dwa razy zapisalo ;/ juz nie moge z tym kompem:) POZDRAWIAM:)

Kate still {insists} on {her} moving out and she doesn't want to listen to any arguments. Her father is furious and {} threatens {} that when she leaves home they won't provide for her and the door to their house will be closed for {their} daughter. The conflict with parents is growing. What should Kate do {in this situation}?

I suggest you keep using the present tenses of your narrative:

1. Kate {moves} out - Kate {decides} to move out from {her} house. She {passes} the GCSE but she {doesn't} get to university. In the course of two years she {calls} only {a} few times and {} never {visits} {her family} - till yesterday. She {decides} to call on {them} because she {has} to {take} her albums from home. She works and she wants to go on to university. She {breaks} with Tom because he {says} that she {owes} everything to him and that he {has} to provide for her. She doesn't want to come back home because she is mature and independent. She {promises} that she will try to {be reconciled} with father and {will}visit {them} {more} often.
2. Kate {doesn't} move out. - She {passes} her GCSE but she {doesn't} get to university. She {breaks} with Tom because he {deceives} her. He is {a} hunter, not {a} forest ranger as he {says}, he doesn't like Spanish {movies} but American {ones} and {he isn't fond of} tennis but {of} football. She {doesn't} want to talk about him any more. For a few weeks she {brings} a new boyfriend to {her} house. He comes from Spain and he doesn't speak Polish. She says that it's {the} love of her life.

bardzo bardzo dzikeuje:* ale czemu present simple jak tam np. pisalam o yesterday?

Using the narrative structure provides us with writing like this. Each moment of a story is represented as a point in time, and 'till yesterday' is one of these points.