Opis rodzeństwa.To wazne-sprawdzicie?BŁAGAM!!

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Błagam,czy ktoś moglby sprawdzic albo cos doradzić? To dla mnie ważne.bo od tego zależy moja ocena.Mój poziom to 1 gimnazjum (jestem w klasie dwujezycznej;/) Z góry dziękuję:

A small girl with the toys on her hands. She used to kept smile all the time and gave our mother a pain. Kamila-my best sister,who I have known since 1998. We met in the hospital. When she was a crying and carefree babie.Kamila is just my little sister.
Kamila is tall,long legged girl.She has an oval face and a slanted brown eyes.Her wavy,dark hairs to a shoulder-lenght shine all the time. She is neither overweight nor skinny. Her dimples during smiling always amuse me. Kamila is only 8 so her complexion is really clear. She wears blouses with a lot of signs. Hardly ever my sister dress up skirts.She would prefer wears trousers.
My younger sister's character is very difficult. If she wants she will be good-natured and friendly.During our nowadays life room is cleaned by Kamila,because she has a funny humor. Supper is made,sweets are given only for me. Her bahavior is very mature. Unfortunately her short-tempered part doesn't want to wait too long. An easy-going girl changes immediately. In spite of that fact my younger sister is trying to be fair,helpful and patient. It is said that a younger sister or brother was always stupid. Kamila must be an exception.She always hard working on her marks.
Although Kamila is a good pupil she has also other hobby:she likes dancing. she had gone on the competition last week.Her team is called"Mini dziesiateczki". A small dancer coped with her scare and danced a simply but pretty cool setup.However in the future she would like to be a veterinarian. The animals like her very much.I suppost that she can aid a lot ij the future.
Kamila-maybe sometimes I can't life with her,but in spite of many disadvantage I know more benefits on living with that cheerful girl.
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dziękuję za uwagę:)
Wiekszosc zdan trzeba poprawic - tz napisac od nowa.
jak na klasę dwujęzyczną to trochę słabo, dużo podstawowych błędów+ wiele błędów stylistycznych- wygląda na pracę z translatorem.

hair- niepoliczalne, więc nie mają liczby mnogiej (później brakuje czasownika)
to keep smilING
best sister- najlepsza siostra ( nawet po polsku dziwnie brzmi)
dress up- chyba lepiej "wears"

During our nowadays life room is
>cleaned by Kamila,because she has a funny humor.- to zdanie nie trzyma się kupy


It is said that a younger sister or
>brother IS always stupid


i wiele wiele innych, myslę że lepiej napisać od początku
"jak na klasę dwujęzyczną to trochę słabo"
No chyba cie pogielo :) Ja zaczolem sie uczyc angielskiego dopiero w 2 klasie szkoly sredniej. Tak jak i pewnie 99% procent spoleczenstwa. Nie liczac bogaczy itd.
A sorry myslelm ze ta osoba jest obecnie w 1 klasie gimnazjum dwujezycznej. A wyglada na to ze jest juz w sredniej. W takim razie cienko z tym poziomem.