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"To buy or not to buy"
Nowadays many people point at riches, their only aim is making extremely big money. This type of dependents want increase social status and posses great fortune. Even that exist people, who belive, that money aren't the most important thing in their life. Materialistic approch to life have several adventages and disadventages.
Arguments:
1) First positive aspect of that, a lot of money makes you have hight standard of living
2)What is more fortune will make you give your money for charity.
On the other hand:
1) aim to riches makes people forget about the most important feelings in their life.
2) The next negative side is possessing too much money makes you became egoistic and selfice person.
jesli ma ktos jeszcze jakies pomysly to prosze napiscie nawet po polsku

Nowadays many people point at riches, their only aim is making
extremely big money Co to znaczy 'big money? - to jest potocz.) This type of dependents (sprawdz w slowniku slowo dependent) want TO increase THEIR social
status and TO posses great fortune. Even (to dalej cos brakuje) thERE exist people, who beliEve, that money aren't (lepiej w calosci 'are not') the most important thingS in their life.
Materialistic approAch to life haS several advAntages and disadvAntages.
Arguments:
1) First positive aspect of that (do czego to 'that' sie odnosi?) a lot of money makes you have hight (zobacz to w slowniku - powinno byc 'a high')standard of living
2)What is more fortune will make you give your money for charity.(ale to nie jest materialistic approach - to jest altruistic)
On the other hand:
1) aim to BEING RICH makes people forget about the most important feelings
in their life (which are:......)
2) The next negative side is possessing too much money makes you
became egoistic and selfiSH person.

Dzięki Ci bardzo:) jesli mozesz to napisz co o tym sądzisz co napisalam? czy to wogole ma jakis sens?