był bym wdzięczny za sprawdzenie mojej historyjki

It’s late, or so 11 o’clock at night. I’m sitting in my club. Is quietly and emptily. A few persons sitting at the bar. James pouring drinks. Suddenly doors are opening and I seeing three guys. They coming up to me. One of they had a big hat, moustache and a glasses. He was well-build and said me, that he and him friends came to me because off money which fall into the king of this street- Lizard. But I wasn’t intend paid because club is always mine, I wasn’t see cause of just. Guy in hat said
- Which you saying that aren’t paying for Lizard?
-Because Lizard is stupid and he it should paying me.
-I think that we can not be apprehended, you paying now or we going to kill you- said men of hat
While Guys saying about interests, James search in pocket a guns, because he will intend kill bad boys.

>It's late, 11 o'clock at night or so. I'm sitting in the club. It's
>quiet and empty. A few people sitting at the bar. James is pouring
>drinks. Suddenly, the door opens and I see three guys. They
>come up to me. One of them has a big hat, moustache and glasses.
>He is well-build. He tells me, that they had come to me
>because of the money which I owed to the king of that street - Lizard. But
>I wasn't going to pay because the club has always been mine, it wasn't fair.
>The guy in the hat said:
>-Which of you is not going to pay Lizard?
>-Lizard is stupid if he thinks I'll pay. He is the one who should pay me.
>-It seems we're not going to see eye to eye, you're paying now or we're going to kill you - said the man.
>While the guys were talking, James searched his pocket for a gun. He was going to get rid of the Lizard's mob.

Hope you like it.
You have to work on your grammar! Good luck :)

Czy nigdy nie uczyles sie uzywac 'the'? Dlaczego tego nie robisz?
Poprawilam, ale pragne zobaczyc nastepna twoja prace bez bledow...

It's late, 'or so 11' (co to?) o'clock at night.
IT is 'quietly' QUIET and 'emptily' EMPTY> (czy w szkole nie ucza was teraz czesci zdania - dlaczego tych zasad nie rozumiesz??)
A few 'persons' PEOPLE ARE sitting at the bar. James (a kto to James - osoba siedzaca przy barze?) IS pouring THE drinks. Suddenly THE doors 'are opening' OPEN and I 'seeing' SEE three guys. They ARE coming up to me. One of 'they' THEM had a big hat, A moustache and 'a' (niepotr) glasses.
He was well-build and said TO me, that he and 'him' HIS friends came to me
because 'off' OF THE money which 'fall' (to jest zle slowo - tutaj ARE DUE) 'into' TO the king of this street- Lizard. But I wasn't intend ON 'paid' PAYING because THE club is always mine, I 'wasn't' DIDN'T see A JUST cause.
'of just' (po jakiemu to?). THE guy in THE hat said - 'Which' ARE you saying that YOU 'aren't' (prosze w calosci- paying 'for' (niepotr) Lizard?
-Because Lizard is stupid and IT IS he WHO 'it' (niepotr) should BE paying me.
-I think that 'we can not be apprehended' (cos tu nie tak ...napisz to inaczej...YOU DO NOT COMPREHEND, you ARE EITHER paying US now or we ARE going to
kill you- said THE 'men' (men to l. mn - tutaj daj l. poj) 'of' WITH THE hat
While THE guys WERE 'saying' TALKING about HIS interests, James searchED in HIS pocket FOR a 'guns' GUN (prosze rozrozniac l. poj od l. mn), because he 'will' WAS intendING TO kill THE bad boys.

Ja bym trzymała się jednego czasu - present lub past... Poczatek jest w present, wiec chyba byloby bardziej logicznie, inaczej wychodzi mały misz-masz ;)

bardzo dziękuję wam za sprawdzenie tego czegoś, nie denerwujcie się ja jestem absolutnym kaleką jeśli chodzi o angielski i właśnie zacząłem podejmować próby zmienienia czegoś, na angileskim nie słuchałem nigdy pani dlatego mieszam czasy nie używam 'the' itp pora na gramatyczną rewolucję:D

nie wiem czy coś tu jeszcze wrzucę przed apokalipsą, zżera mnie wstyd:P

Ja uwazam ze kazdy ma prawo do pisania jak potrafi wiec sie tym naprawde nie przejmuj i pisz kiedy musisz. nie sluchaj tych co sie uwazaja za ekspertow, bo kazdy z nas przez to przechodzil lub wielu bedzie prezchodzic. Nikt nie urodzil sie z jezykiem w gebie, w szczegolnosci kiedy urodzil sie w Polsce. Pozdrawiam i zycze zaparcia w dazeniu do doskonalosci. Jestem pewna, ze ktoregos dnia obudzisz sie i bedziesz dumny z tego jak potrafisz sie wypowiadac pozdrawiam

ferdele-
Twoje zadanie bylo prawie dobrze, tam byly malenkie bledy - ale chociaz z tego cos sie nauczysz. Smialo mozesz wklejac nastepne, nikt tutaj nie bedzie sie smial, bo chociaz wiemy, ze sam to robisz, nie tak jak niektorzy tutaj na forum palcem (czy nawet du..) nie rusza a wymagaja przetlumaczenia, albo zrobienia za nich.
Czytalam dzisiaj, ze nawet nauczyciele polecaja to forum.

>Ja uwazam ze kazdy ma prawo do pisania jak potrafi wiec sie tym
>naprawde nie przejmuj i pisz kiedy musisz.

Oczywiście :) Wszyscy na tym forum tak uważają. Jak nie będzie pisał, to się nie nauczy. Małymi krokami do przodu.

nie sluchaj tych co sie
>uwazaja za ekspertow,

Tylko kogo ma słuchać?

bo kazdy z nas przez to przechodzil lub wielu
>bedzie prezchodzic.
Masz rację. Każdy bez wyjątku.

Hello Terri :)
Could you hit me on Skype, please?
Thx :)

>>>nie sluchaj tych co sie uwazaja za ekspertow,
Oh, how I just love these back-handed compliments. When you become an expert, only then will you realize how hard it was to get there. And don't ever write 'co sie uwazaja', because that, my dear, I do not like.

and another thing, tina 25-
...do you call yourself an expert and are you the person he should listen to?

Terri i don't call myself an expert, but i think I have a little bit of life experience. Living in another country where everybody speaks English thought me how to use the language. But like everybody else here I can't call myself an expert or genious( not to embarass you)

But like everybody else
>here...

And you know everybody else here? I can assure you that there is at least one expert here. And no, it's not me.

Living in another country where everybody speaks
>English

There is about a dozen people here who live in English-speaking countries, so welcome to the club!

Oh, and there is also one resident native speaker here.

Who speaks fluent Polish.

I've got to start counting to 10 before I click "send" LOL

hej Eva you are still here? Wow you really want to practice English good for you. If you ever have time we can actually chat with each other. It can be benefitial to both of us.

now it's about the time when i have to go to sleep. It's quarter to 12 and I am sleepy. I visited this web side before, but totaly forgot about it. I'll hear from you tomorow after work.

Well, thank you, but I'm afraid that I'm not into Internet chats too much.
Sorry :)

>>>Terri 'i' (?) don't call myself an expert, but 'i' (ja lubie I duza litera) think I have a little bit of life experience.
...I can assure you (without a shadow of a doubt) that your life experience is perhaps a quarter of mine. (if that)
>>>Living in another country where everybody speaks English thought me how to use the language.
...And where do you think I live....cloud cuckoo land?
>>>But like everybody else here I can't call myself an expert..
...I've seen some of your posts - and I don't want to embarass you.

tina -
>>>hej Eva you are still here? Wow you really want to practice English
good for you.
...before you make statements like that in the future, do make sure that you know the person you are addressing.
>>It can be benefitial to both of us.??