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Polecenie :

Podczas studiów w Anglii przeczytałeś w szkolnej gazetce studenckiej, że twój uniwersytet zamierza zamknąć dyskusyjny klub filmowy działający przy szkole od wielu lat. Napisz list do redakcji gazetki :

1. Przedstaw się i określ cel listu
2. Napisz o ważnej roli klubu w życiu studenckim i o jego długoletniej tradycji
3. Podaj dwa powody dlaczego klub nie powinien zostać zamknięty
4. Zachęć innych czytelników do wyrażenia swoich opinii i wyraź nadzieje że klub nie zostanie zamknięty.

List :

Dear Sir or Madam

I am student of the Oxford University and I am writing to express my dissatisfaction of the University efforts. School authorities want to close discussion club film. This club was open 50 years ago and is still an important part of University.
First of all this club is kind of spend free time for many students. Many of us can talking about favorites films, meeting new friends and watch movies which they never heard.
Secondly, this club is very famous institution. For 50 years is became prestigious place. Many graduates still interested in the club. Furthermore a few of they became famous peoples and sometimes they mention of this institution in TV or newspapers.
I look forward to reading the opinions of other readers yours newspaper, and I hope the club will not be closed.

Yours faithfully
XYZ.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am a student of the Oxford University and I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the plan of the university leadership of the University efforts. The University board School authorities want intend to close down the Discussion Film Club. This club was opened up 50 years ago and is still an important part of the University.
First of all, this club gives the opportunity for the students to spend their free time thereis kind of spend free time for many students. Many of the students can talk about their favourite films, meet new friends and watch movies which they (have) never heard of before.
Secondly, this club is a well-known institution. For 50 years is becameit has become a prestigious place. Many graduates are still interested in the club. Furthermore, a few of them became famous people and sometimes they mention of this institution inon TV or in a newspaper.
I look forward to reading the opinions of other readers of your newspaper, and I hope the club will not be closed.

Yours faithfully
XYZ.

Dzięki wielkie za pomoc.

club was opened up (UP jest niepotr) 50 years ago...
First of all, this club gives 'the' (nie, tutaj An, you give an apportunity...) opportunity for the students ..
For 50 years is becameit has become a (to jest zle, powinno byc IT HAS BEEN A)prestigious place.

A po co was?

...club was opened 50 years ago by an old boy...
...club opened 50 years ago amidst pomp and ceremony and a smattering of local celebrities...

co do zdania, ze klub daje mozliwosc studentom: Czy nie mozna uzasadnic uzycia 'the' tym, ze ta mozliwosc jest w nastepujacej czesci zdania skonkretyzowana?

nie, to the brzmi, jakby ta możliwość była znana wszystkim czytelnikom jeszcze przed przeczytaniem tekstu, jakby ona była jedyna na świecie

Ok, dzieki za szybka odpowiedz.

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