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In today’s world we can often see that the most of families are in real hard material situations. Earnings they get last scarcely for paying taxes, shopping and other basic expenses. In addition to expenditure on home there appears expenditure on children but especially on teenagers who sometimes have big needs. We can’t forget that education absorbs much money too. Maybe if these young people would start working for themselves something could change. Is that a good idea? That’s the question we need to answer.

It seems clear that every young person needs money. Of course it’s easy to go and ask your parents for it but harder to get it on your own. First of all, if young people would start working for themselves they would gain great respect for the money and work. In this way they would learn how much effort their parents put to give them the best conditions of life. Possibility to earn some cash would also allow them to learn a reasonable and proper management of the money. Thanks to that they would save plenty of money, which could be given to their parents for expenses associated with maintaining their homes.

On the other hand earning money by adolscents can lead to neglect of science. Young people instead of devoting their precious time to prepare for important exams would lose it on the earning of money which wouldn’t be the most important thing for them. What is more, taking a wrong job by a young person could expose her to taking advantage of her because of the young age or even a breakdown.

To sum up, I would say that earning money is not the most important thing for the young people although it has many positive aspects. They should learn more instead of working, which will certainly result in getting better, well paid job.

In today’s world we can often see that 'the' (niepotr) most 'of' (niepotr) families are in real hard material situations. Earnings they get last scarcely 'for' IN paying taxes, shopping and other basic expenses. In addition to expenditure on home there ALSO appears expenditure on children but especially on teenagers who sometimes have 'big' (poszukaj inne slowo) needs.

In this way they would learn how much effort their parents put IN to give them the best conditions of life. THE possibility to earn some cash would also allow them to learn a reasonable and proper management of the money.

On the other hand earning money by 'adolscents' (ortog) can lead to neglect of 'science' (zle slowo). Young people instead of devoting their precious time 'to prepare' IN PREPARING for important exams would lose it on the earning of money which wouldn’t be the most important thing for them. What is more, taking a wrong job by a young person could expose 'her' THEM to BEING TAKEN 'taking' (niepotr) advantage of 'her' (niepotr) because of the young age or even 'a breakdown' (zalamanie - tego nie rozumiem).

To sum up, I would say that earning money is not the most important thing for the young people although it has many positive aspects. They should 'learn' (daj tutaj STUDY) more instead of working, which will certainly result in getting A better, well paid job.

Poprawiłem już ale proszę o ostateczne sprawdzenie. Znalazłem ciekawy zwrot 'health hazard', czyli ryzyko utraty zdrowia, narażenie zdrowia itp. Nie wiem tylko czy go właściwie zastosowałem.

Oto tekst poprawiony:

In today’s world we can often see that most families are in real hard material situations. Earnings they get last scarcely in paying taxes, shopping and other basic expenses. In addition to expenditure on home there also appears expenditure on children but especially on teenagers who sometimes have tidy needs. We can’t forget that education absorbs much money too. Maybe if these young people would start working for themselves something could change. Is that a good idea? That’s the question we need to answer.

It seems clear that every young person needs money. Of course it’s easy to go and ask your parents for it but harder to get it on your own. First of all, if young people would start working for themselves they would gain great respect for the money and work. In this way they would learn how much effort their parents put in to give them the best conditions of life. The possibility to earn some cash would also allow them to learn a reasonable and proper management of the money. Thanks to that they would save plenty of money, which could be given to their parents for expenses associated with maintaining their homes.

On the other hand earning money by youths can lead to neglect of learning. Young people instead of devoting their precious time in preparing for important exams would lose it on the earning of money which wouldn’t be the most important thing for them. What is more, taking a wrong job by a young persons could expose them to being taken advantage of because of the young age or even a health hazard.

To sum up, I would say that earning money is not the most important thing for the young people although it has many positive aspects. They should study more instead of working, which will certainly result in getting a better, well paid job.

In today’s world we can often see that most families are in 'real hard' (zmien to na 'really desperate) material situations.
...expenditure of tennagers who sometimes have 'tidy' (nie, nie, daj tutaj 'extensive') needs. (tidy znaczy 'czyste, posprzatane)

On the other hand earning money by youths can lead to 'neglect of learning' (daj to inaczej...study neglect') .
What is more, taking a wrong job by a young persons could expose them to being taken advantage of because of theIR young age or even a JOB WHICH IS 'health hazard' (napisz hazardous to their heath).

Hmm dziwne sprawdzałem w słowniku online, takim dość dobrym(nie google) i pisało, że 'tidy' znaczy też 'spory'. Hmm...

Dobra poprawiłem. Oto tekst:

In today’s world we can often see that most families are in really desperate material situations. Earnings they get last scarcely in paying taxes, shopping and other basic expenses. In addition to expenditure on home there also appears expenditure on children but especially on teenagers who sometimes have extensive needs. We can’t forget that education absorbs much money too. Maybe if these young people would start working for themselves something could change. Is that a good idea? That’s the question we need to answer.

It seems clear that every young person needs money. Of course it’s easy to go and ask your parents for it but harder to get it on your own. First of all, if young people would start working for themselves they would gain great respect for the money and work. In this way they would learn how much effort their parents put in to give them the best conditions of life. The possibility to earn some cash would also allow them to learn a reasonable and proper management of the money. Thanks to that they would save plenty of money, which could be given to their parents for expenses associated with maintaining their homes.

On the other hand earning money by youths can lead to study neglect. Young people instead of devoting their precious time in preparing for important exams would lose it on the earning of money which wouldn’t be the most important thing for them. What is more, taking a wrong job by a young persons could expose them to being taken advantage of because of their young age or even a job which is hazardous to their health.

To sum up, I would say that earning money is not the most important thing for the young people although it has many positive aspects. They should study more instead of working, which will certainly result in getting a better, well paid job.