Proszę o sprawdzenie opowiadania

Mam duże trudności z rozroznieniem dwoch czasów przeszlych, wiec mogą byc liczne bledy. Prosze o poprawe i jeżeli byloby to możliwe wytłumaczenie, dlaczego tak a nie inaczej.



It was a very beautiful Juli day. I was travelling in Ecuador and I decided to go on kayaking trip with friends .We were swimming on river. It was a very beautiful tropical scenery. The mosquitoes were flying around. It was a very nice.. Sudennly I fall that my kajakh swimming very fast. I thought that I died. My heart was beating very fast. Then I hit a rock and I felled out. My kayak has turned. I couldn’t go to him. It was a very scaring. I fall terrible. . I wanted to went home.then saw a strange shape in water. Suddenly my friend Jame cried “ oh no sara it’s a crocodile”. Crocodile drawed on me fast. It was scared and dangerous. Suddenly I saw that crocodile proved a branch. Everyone started to laughed. I fall terrible. Danger has passed.

I think that it was a very funny day. Although it was a very scaring anything ended good.

It was a very beautiful 'Juli' (blad ortog) day. I was travelling in Ecuador and I decided to go on (brak przedimka) kayaking trip with friends .We were swimming 'on' IN (you swim IN the river, in the pool...) (brak przedimka) river.
It was a very nice (ale co? tutaj cos brakuje, dlatego ze dalas 'a' to musi byc cos dalej)
'Sudennly' (ortog) I 'fall' (to jest zle slowo-czas przeszly) that my 'kajakh' (ortog) (tu cos brak) 'swimming' (nie, daj inne slowo) very fast. I thought that I 'died' (to zdanie nie jest zrozumiale..moze byc '...that I would die, albo that I had died.)
Then I hit a rock and I 'felled' (tutaj czas przeszly ale to jest niereg. czasownik) out. My kayak 'has' (czas przeszly) turned OVER. I couldn’t go 'to him' (nie, kayak to jest'it'). It was 'a' (po co dajesz to 'a'?) very 'scaring' (zla czesc mowy) . I 'fall' (zle slowo i czas niereg) terrible. . I wanted to 'went' GO home. Then (ale kto? musisz napisac) saw a strange shape in (brak przedimka) water. Suddenly my friend JameS cried OUT “ oh no Sara it’s a crocodile”. Crocodile 'drawed' (zle slowo) on me fast. 'It was scared' (wyglada, ze ten corcodile byl scared?) and dangerous. Suddenly I saw that (brak przedimka) crocodile proved TO BE ONLY a branch. Everyone started to 'laughed' (czas teraz). I 'fall' (zle slowo-popraw) terrible. (brak przedimka) danger 'has' (zly czas, tu przeszly) passed.
Although it was 'a' (co to z tym 'a' - dajesz go wszedzie gdzie nieportrzeba) very scaring 'anything' (zle slowo, tutaj EVERYTHING ended 'good.' WELL (poczytaj o roznicy pomiedzy 'good' i 'well')