rozprawka

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Proszę o sprawdzenie rozprawki. A jakby ktoś był super, ekstra miły i dodatkowo pomógł mi wykreślić parę zdań, bo jak zwykle przekroczyłam limit słów i to o 44, to byłabym dozgonnie wdzięczna! ;)
ps: czy tylko ja uważam, że powinni zwiększyć limit słów o 100, albo i 150, bo od 2[tel]to nic nie można stworzyć sensownego. jeszcze raz dzięki za sprawdzenie.

Cienie i blaski życia w wielkim mieście.

For many of us big city is associated with a better life. Hundreds of shops, bars, thousands of people and twice more opportunities to meet someone interesting. Creation of a stereotype that there is no time for boredom. But as the time is passing by life trends have changed.

Living in the big city is certainly very convenient, everything is handy. You do not have to devote a whole day to do the shopping. If you run out of something, just grab and go out. There are thousands of them from the smallest ones (a district shopping centre) to the biggest with various types of shops (a mall). Nearness to the number of large stores, different types of agencies or hospitals is not the only merit. When you live in the city you do not have to worry if your car starts or if it has enough petrol to get to the town. You can take a walk or use a bus service to not (to) be late for an important meeting. Also most of jobs advertisements offer a post in big cities so it makes you more attractive candidate.

However, recently many people moved out to a countryside. Without a shadow of a doubt, desire to live in a quiet place play a part in this decision. Big city is equivalent to a big noise, crowded streets and a big air pollution level. Many young marriages do not want to raise their children in a city smog while elder people just dream about peaceful ending of their life.

Having an address in the big city is not any more a determinant of a social status. It is something that you want to have or else you will not survive in the city jungle.
Cytat: meg997
Proszę o sprawdzenie rozprawki. A jakby ktoś był super, ekstra miły i dodatkowo pomógł mi wykreślić parę zdań, bo jak zwykle przekroczyłam limit słów i to o 44, to byłabym dozgonnie wdzięczna! ;)
ps: czy tylko ja uważam, że powinni zwiększyć limit słów o 100, albo i 150, bo od 2[tel]to nic nie można stworzyć sensownego. jeszcze raz dzięki za sprawdzenie.

Cienie i blaski życia w wielkim mieście.

For many of us PRZEDIMEK big city is associated with a better life. TU BRAKUJE ORZECZENIA->Hundreds of shops, bars, thousands of people and twice more opportunities to meet someone interesting. TU TEZ NIE MA ORZECZENIA Creation of a stereotype that there is no time for boredom. But as the time PASSES by<-USUN, BO TO ZNACZY 'CZAS NAS OMIJA' life trends have changed.CZEMU PRESENT PERFECT?

Living in the big city is certainly very convenient, everything is CLOSE AT HAND. You do not have to SPEND a whole day USUNIETO shopping. If you run out of something, just grab CO? and go out. There are thousands of them CZEGO? from the smallest ones (a district shopping centre) to the biggest with various types of shops (a mall). LIVING LOSE TO A number of large stores, different types of agencies or hospitals is not the only merit. When you live in the city you do not have to worry if your car starts or if it has enough petrol to get to the<-USUN town. You can take a walk or use a bus service SO AS not to be late for an important meeting. Also most of<USUN job advertisements offer a post JEDNO STANOWISKO W ROZNYCH DUZYCH MIASTACH? in big cities so it makes you PRZEDIMEK more attractive candidate.

However, recently many people PRESENT PERFECT moved out to a countryside. Without a shadow of a doubt, PRZEDIMEK desire to live in a quiet place play<-ZLA FORMA a part in this decision. PRZEDIMEK Big city is equivalent to a big noise, crowded streets and a HIGH air pollution level. Many young COUPLES do not want to raise their children in a city smog while elderLY people just dream about A peaceful ending of their life.

Having an address in the big city is NO more a determinant of ONE'S social status. It is something that you want to have or else you will not survive in the city jungle.

But as the time PASSES by<-USUN, BO TO ZNACZY 'CZAS NAS OMIJA' life trends have changed.CZEMU PRESENT PERFECT? --> użyłam present perfect, bo trendy się zmieniły i zmieniają nadal. jest to dłuższa akcja i niedokończona.

You do not have to SPEND a whole day USUNIETO shopping. --> czy gdybym uparła się przy słowie "poświęcać" zamiast devote powinnam była użyć sacrifice?

. Without a shadow of a doubt, PRZEDIMEK desire to live in a quiet place play<-ZLA FORMA a part in this decision. --> played a part ?

jezeli zaczynasz zdanie od 'z biegiem czasu' w simple present, to znaczy, ze chcesz mowic o ponadczasowej prawdzie, co wymaga takze simple present.
napisz with time, trends have changed

devote jest ok, ale mialo byc krocej

played - nie wiem, czy ma byc czas przeszly, czy terazniejszys
aha aha aha już wiem, co źle zrobiłam z tym play. tzn. gdybym chciała zostać przy teraź to po prostu zapomniałam o końcówce "s", tak? moje przeoczenie ;)

dzięki za sprawdzenie :)
jassne
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