Sprawdzenie wiersza

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Proszę o sprawdzenie wiersza.
Dans Macabre

You've danced till the last breath
in your dead throes
among the skeletons

The night fell
and
the sticky mist
closed your lips

Smile of sweet lemons
invited me to death

You are going through the path
of forgotten night
Visiting next souls
which suffer the insomnia

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