PROSZĘ O SPRAWDZENIE- PLUSY I MINUSY BYCIA DZIECKIEM SŁAWNYCH RODZICOW ROZPRAWKA

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Nowadays many people believe that being a child of famous parents has no disadvantages and that widely known surname makes everything easier. The truth is, it actually has many minuses. In my essay I would like to focus on this statement.
First and foremost, one of the advantages of being a child of famous parents is the fact that they attend to the best private schools. They have the best teachers, famous friends what provides better future prospects.
Secondly, they actually have more friends that normal children.They are very popular in their schools and everyone wants to get to know them.
Thirdly, very often they travel around the world with they parents what involves contact with other famous people. They have many possibilities of meeting their idol.
However, there is no doubt that they have to pay attention to their behavior. If they fail at something or do something bad, everyone will know about it, every gossip about them is widely spread.
What is more, they have to work harder to be appreciated. People tend to think that children of famous parents are lazy and that they take everything for granted.
All in all, we can never be sure what it feels like to be a child of famous parents until we become one. In my opinion it has as many benefits as drawbacks.

Cytat:
Nowadays many people believe that being a child of famous parents has no disadvantages and that widely known surname makes everything easier. The truth is, it actually has many minuses. In my essay I would like to focus on this statement.
First and foremost, one of the advantages of being a child of famous parents is the fact that they attend to the best private schools. They have the best teachers, famous friends(,) what provides better future prospects.
Secondly, they actually have more friends that normal (ja bym napisała 'average', bo wygląda tak, jakby ci sławni byli nienormalni :) ) children. They are very popular in their schools and everyone wants to get to know them.
Thirdly, very often they travel around the world with they parents(,) what involves contact with other famous people. They have many possibilities of meeting their idol.
However, there is no doubt that they have to pay attention to their behavior. If they fail at something or do something bad, everyone will know about it, every gossip about them is widely spread.
What is more, they have to work harder to be appreciated. People tend to think that children of famous parents are lazy and that they take everything for granted.
All in all, we can never be sure what it feels like to be a child of famous parents until we become one. In my opinion it has as many benefits as drawbacks.

Nie ma się do czego przyczepić :) Ze dwa brakujące przecinki, no i to 'attend' - jest attend school, bez 'to'.
edytowany przez Just_Annie: 11 lut 2013
A widely (wole "well")l known surname
what (zle) provides better...
have more friends that (zle) normal (tez wole average)
what (zle) involves contact
idol(s)...l.mn
every gossip about them is widely spread ( popracuj dalej)

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