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Some people think its better to live with a roommate. Other people prefer to live alone. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Some people really want to have a roommate in them flat because they can’t live without others. But a lot of people preferring to live alone because they feel safer and they have silence which they need. In this essay I want to represent reasons and my opinion about following topic.

Firstly, living with a roommate in a flat can be cheaper. For example when we want to rent our dream house but we do not have enough money, we can find someone else who would live there with us. It is really helpful and comfortable idea to decrease our payment for the flat.

Secondly, live with other people can create a friendship. Person who spend a lot of time with someone else can create friendship. For example when we spent a lot of time with other person we can discover his history or his favorite activities. Moreover It can increase our contact with a roommate.

Next, it can increase mutual help with a roommate. For example a roommate on studies can help someone else in a homework or he can explain the certain topic that we do not understand. It is the same situation when we want help with other problems like cooking or problems on family level.

However, sometimes a roommate can be the biggest problem in a flat. He can be lazy, moody, selfish or just annoying. Roommate can be dangerous sometimes. For example when we want to ask him about something and suddenly he starting to scream. We must know something about future roommate because it can be the worst decision in our live.

To sum up a flat with a roommate can be a really good idea. Live with a roommate have a lot of advantages. In my opinion we should live with a roommate but we have to pay attention who we choose.
Some people really want to have a roommate in 'them' (zle slowo) flat because they can’t live without others. But a lot of people 'preferring' (zle slowo) to live alone because they feel safer and they have silence which they need. In this essay I want to represent reasons and my opinion about (a gdzie przedimek?)following topic.

For example when we want to rent our dream house (przecinek) but we do not have enough money, we can find someone else who would live there with us. It is (przedimek) really helpful and 'comfortable' (nie za bardzo trafne slowo) idea to decrease our payment for the flat.

Secondly, 'live' (tutaj ma byc rzeczownik) with other people can create a friendship. (przedimek) person who spendS a lot of time with someone else can create friendship. For example when we 'spent' (zly czas) a lot of time with ANother person we can discover 'his' (uzyj slowo 'their') history or 'his' (their) favorite activities. Moreover (przecinek) iIt can increase our contact with a roommate.

Next, it can 'increase' (daj inne slowo) mutual help with a roommate. For example a roommate 'on' ((to jest kalka z polskiego 'na', ale musi byc inaczej, dlaczego nie napiszesz ...a student) studies can help someone else 'in' (zle slowo, tutaj WITH) 'a' (niepotr) homework or he can explain 'the' (zly przedimek) certain topic that we do not understand. It is the same situation when we want help with other problems like cooking or problems 'on' (zle slowo AT) (przedimek) family level.

(przedimek) roommate can be dangerous sometimes. For example when we want to ask him about something and suddenly he 'starting' (zle slowo) to scream. We must know something about (przedimek) future roommate because it can be the worst decision in our 'live' (tutaj daj rzeczownik).

To sum up (przecinek) a flat with a roommate can be a really good idea. 'Live' (rzeczownik, dlaczego dajesz czasownik?) with a roommate 'have' HAS a lot of advantages. In my opinion we should live with a roommate (przecinek) but we have to pay attention whoM we choose.
Some people really want to have a roommate in their flat because they can’t live without others. But a lot of people choosing to live alone because they feel safer and they have silence which they need. In this essay I want to represent reasons and my opinion about the following topic.

Firstly, living with a roommate in a flat can be cheaper. For example when we want to rent our dream house, but we do not have enough money, we can find someone else who would live there with us. It is a really helpful and good idea to decrease our payment for the flat.

Secondly, life with other people can create a friendship. A person who spends a lot of time with someone else can create friendship. For example when we spend a lot of time with another person we can discover their history or their favorite activities. Moreover, it can increase our contact with a roommate.

Next, it can exist mutual help with a roommate. For example a student can help someone else with homework or he can explain a certain topic that we do not understand. It is the same situation when we want help with other problems like cooking or problems at a family level.
However, sometimes a roommate can be the biggest problem in a flat. He can be lazy, moody, selfish or just annoying. A roommate can be dangerous sometimes. For example when we want to ask him about something and suddenly he beginning to scream. We must know something about a future roommate because it can be the worst decision in our life.

To sum up, a flat with a roommate can be a really good idea. Life with a roommate has a lot of advantages. In my opinion we should live with a roommate, but we have to pay attention whom we choose.

Mam nadzieję, że poprawiłem wszystkie błędy. Zauważyłem że popełniam błędy, które są banalne. Nie zwracam uwagi na błędy, które myślę że poprawiłbym. Niedługo wyślę kolejny essay i błędów będzie mniej :)
But a lot of people ,choosing' choose
to decrease to lower bardziej pasuje
life with other people can create friendships
discover their history or their favorite activities----learn about their history
Next, it can exist mutual help with a roommate to nie ma sensu -moze lepiej roomates can help eachother.
problems at a family level. poprostu with family problems
beginning to scream -beginns to
We must know something about -we must learn something
edytowany przez agrafa21: 03 gru 2013

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