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Thesis topic: Risk analysis on the example of laser cutting machine operator in the SaMasz company

The purpose of this engineer thesis is assessment of the professional risk of laser cutting machine operator. Instead the purpose of this analysis is to reduce the risk and to improve the safety and health at work. The correct risk assessment is a very important aspect in every company. Risk reduction provides to improvement the working conditions, better use of human sources, reduction in downtime, better atmosphere at work and increasing the company’s profits. The dissertation includes three chapters.
The first part includes definitions, different methods and general issues of risk assessment. The professional risk is the probability of adverse events associated with their work, resulting in losses as well as their effects on the health or life of employees in the form of occupational diseases and accidents at work. Additionally the chapter contains the legal aspects of professional risk. In general the first part includes a theoretical approach to risk which allows proper risk assessment.
The second chapter contains a description of the company SaMasz, organizational structure and description of manufacturing process. SaMasz has gained position of the biggest polish and one of the major european manufacturers of grassland machinery. Their offer consists of around 300 different types of machines: drum and disc mowers, rotary rakes and tedders, flail mowers, arm-type flail mowers, snow plows.
The third chapter includes characteristics of the analyzed workstation. It also includes risk assessment and suggestions for improvement. In relation to that position is physical work there are many threats like mobile tool, hot plate, transport by overhead cranes, the possibility of fire, laser radiation and many others. These are threats that can reduce and I suggested solutions how to do it. One of the solutions is smoke detector which warns about gas leak. The smoke detector can effectively prevent the breakout fire.

Z góry dziękuję za pomoc. :)

Risk reduction provides to improvement powinno być albo bez "to" albo zmień na leads to improvement of albo Risk reduction improves...

Polish i European musi być z wielkiej litery.

The third chapter includes characteristics of the analyzed workstation - co masz na myśli pisząc workstation? Chodzi o miejsce pracy? To work position albo work site. Zależnie od kontekstu.

In relation to that position is physical work there are many threats like mobile tool, hot plate, transport by overhead cranes, the possibility of fire, laser radiation and many others. - zamiast threats napisałbym hazards, bo bardziej pasuje do oceny ryzyka w przemyśle.

These are threats that can reduce and I suggested solutions how to do it. - chyba powinno być can be reduced? A dalej chyba I suggest...

One of the solutions is smoke detector which warns about gas leak. The smoke detector can effectively prevent the breakout fire - powinno być warns against. - lepiej byłoby efficiently prevent. A co chcesz powiedzieć pisząc breakout fire? Czy to ma być wybuch pożaru? Napisz po prostu fire. Bez the.

The purpose of this 'engineer' (niepotr) thesis is (brak przedimka) assessment of the professional risk of laser cutting machine operator. 'Instead the purpose' (cos tu nie tak, najpierw piszesz jedno a pozniej drugie, to musi byc inaczej ujete) of this analysis is to reduce the risk (ale czego?) and to improve the 'safety and health' (jest przyjete, ze piszemy 'health and safety') at work. The 'correct' (nie, to slowo nic mi nie mowi - musisz postarac sie o konkretne) risk assessment is a very important aspect in every company (dlaczego)?. Risk reduction provides 'to' (niepotr) improvement OF the working conditions, better use of human REsources, reduction in downtime, better atmosphere at work 'and' (ja bym to dala inaczej...np. slowo 'thus') increasing the company’s profits. 'The dissertation includes three chapters' (nie rozumiem po co to jest tutaj..).
The first part includes definitions, different methods and general issues of risk assessment. The professional risk is the probability of adverse events associated with 'their' (nie rozumiem do czego to 'their' sie odnosi) work, resulting in losses as well as 'their' (nie rozumiem tego 'their' tutaj) effects on the health or life of employees in the form of occupational diseases and accidents at work.
'In general the first part includes' (tego nie trzeba, mozna This is) a theoretical approach to risk which allows 'proper' (a jaki jest 'improper' risk assessment - poszukaj wiecej trafne slowo) risk assessment.
The second chapter contains a description of the company SaMasz, THE organizational structure and description of (brak przedimka) manufacturing process. SaMasz has gained (brak przedimka) position of the biggest 'polish' (duza litera) and one of the major European manufacturers of grassland machinery.
The third chapter 'includes' (mozna uzyc slowo' shows' the) characteristics of the analyzed workstation. It also includes risk assessment and suggestions for improvement. In relation to 'that position' (nie rozumiem o jaka 'position' tutaj chodzi) is physical work WHERE there are many threats like mobile tool, hot plate, transport by overhead cranes, the possibility of fire, laser radiation. 'and many others' (nie pisz tak, bo ktos pomysli, ze nie miales checi wiecej napisac). These are threats that can reduce (ale co? musisz napisac) and 'I' (nie pisz tak, ;lepiej...there are) suggested 'solutions how to do it' (moze daj slowo 'recommendations'). One of the solutions is (brak przedimka) smoke detector which warns about gas leakS. The smoke detector can effectively prevent the breakout (brak 2 slowa) fire.

Dla mnie to troszeczke za dlugie, mozna cos poucinac, albo strescic zeby sie lepiej czytalo.