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This essay will examine the danger which is conntected with the young people driving a car. The youth wants to pass the drivers license test as soon as it is possible. It is belived that such rush may cause unpleasant accidents and that is why inexperienced drivers ought to drive with a comrade. However, this solution not only has advantages but also disadvantages.
One point of view is that a experienced driver beside a person who has just passed an exam may cause a feeling of safety. Many parents do not want to allow their children to drive without a supervision for fear of unexpected events such as collision or sideslip. The comrade would be there to prevent the unpleasantness from happening. Furthermore, a new driver will be given another chance of learning how to act on the road.
Contrary to the above ideas there are does who belive that a companionship in the car may be a reason of distraction. Not only do the driver have to focus on the driving but also on his comrade. Because of the feeling of the supervision people may also feel nervous, which will add more stress to the whole situation. Another point worth mentioning is that the later one would drive alone, the harder it is going to be.
In conclusion, the companionship of any kind may also bring misfortune as well as prevent from it. Only if the driver wants to have additional lessons, he will benefit from it. Whether to use this soultion or not depends on a person.

This essay will examine the danger 'which is' (niepotrzebne slowa) 'conntected' (blad ortog) with 'the' (niepotr) young people driving a car. The 'youth' (to dla mnie wyglada na jednego mlodego czlowieka, i wg mnie slowo 'youngsters' jest wiecej popularne) wanT to pass the 'drivers' (nie wiem czy to jest AmE, ale w BrE chyba 'driving') license test as soon as 'it is' (niepotr) possible. It is 'belived' (ortog) that such A rush may cause unpleasant accidents and that is why inexperienced drivers ought to drive with a 'comrade' (nie, lepiej 'companion', bo on ma byc 'accompanied by a driver').
One point of view is that 'a' (zapomniales, ze tutaj przedimek ma byc AN) experienced driver beside a person who has just passed an exam may 'cause' (to dla mnie jest zle slowo, tutaj 'give') a feeling of safety. Many parents do not want to allow their children to drive without 'a' (niepotr) supervision for fear of unexpected events such as (brak przedimka) collision or 'sideslip' (nie rozumiem tego slowa). The 'comrade' (to mnie bardzo przypomina stare filmy James Bond, i USSR, lepiej 'companion') would be there to prevent 'the' (moze lepiej 'any') unpleasantness from happening.
Contrary to the above ideas there are 'does' (hello? kto Ci pomagal przez telefon? slowo jest THOSE) who 'belive' (prosze zapoznas sie z tym w jaki sposob piszemy to slowo) that a companionship in the car may be a reason of distraction. Not only doES the driver have to focus on the driving (przecinek przed slowem 'but') but also on his 'comrade' (napisz friend, companion). 'Because' (staraj sie nie zaczynac zdan ze slowem 'because'-chociaz wiem, ze ludzie to robia, ale lepiej nie) of the feeling of 'the' (niepotr) supervision people may also feel nervous, which will add more stress to the whole situation. Another point worth mentioning is that 'the' (niepotr) later IF 'one' (znowu zle uslyszales przez telefon...the driver) would drive alone, the harder it is going to be.
In conclusion, the companionship of any kind may also bring misfortune as well as prevent 'from' (niepotr) it. Only if the driver wants to have additional lessons, 'he will' (zla kolejnosc slow, ..will he) benefit from it. Whether to use this 'soultion' (ortog) or not depends on 'a' (zly przedimek, tutaj THE) person.

dzieki!