Proszę o sprawdzenie. Ważne:)

Witam!
Proszę o sprawdzenie:) Jest to rozwinięcie innej zamieszczonej tu pracy przez "mon@ax" jednak jest mój wkład pracy:)
Proszę o w miarę dokładne sprawdzenie i pomoc w ułożeniu źle zbudowanych zdań.

The ideal school is what every studeents dream. In that school students should feel relaxed and go to it pleasure. So in the ideal school nice and understanding teachers teach.

Students ouhtn't to come to school sleepy. They have to be relaxed and in a good mood. Lessons start at 8.30 a.m. ind end at 2 p.m. Breaks are persist fifteen minutes and lesson thirty. Teachers are sociable, creative and patient. They always hepl students with their problems. Each pupil has a computer and he/she studies only he/she wants. In a class is about twenty students. Half of this students are girls and half boys. To this school studeents and teachers go in their favourite clothes. Usually boys in loose slacks and blouses, and girls in miniskirts and t-shirts with big decolts. The ideal school is safe but in they aren't installed the cameras becouse students must be free physical and psyhical.

Swimming pool, libary with computers, drink machines and smoking-room are only some facilities is school of my dream.
It is a pleasure going to that school. The lessons aren't borning, teachers are open-minded as their pupils. Every topic is clear becouse the teachers has explainded everything.
After school large part of students go home. Second part usually boys go to a school brawl between black and white students of this school. This brawl are of course top secret becouse illegal and any teacher or other people don't know about this clashs.

Isn't that the school of your dreams?

Jest ok - ale zauwaz 'l. poj' a 'l. mnoga' - zauwaz, ze BACAUSE piszemy z 'a'

The ideal school is 'what' (nie rozumie tego 'what' tutaj) every studEent's dream. In that school students should feel relaxed and go to it WITH pleasure. So in the ideal school nice and understanding teachers WOULD teach (cos to zdanie mi sie niepodoba, lepiej...in the ideal school, it would only be the nice and understanding teachers that would teach)

Students 'ouhtn't' (tutaj potrz w calosci - chyba masz na mysli 'ought not') to come to school sleepy.
Lessons WOULD start at 8.30 a.m. And end at 2 p.m. Breaks are 'persist' (nie rozumiem tego slowa tutaj) 15 minutes and A lesson 30.
They always heLP students with their problems.
Each pupil has a computer and he/she studies only WHAT he/she wants. (na he/she mozna napisac 'they') 'In a class is about twenty students' (lepiej ...There would be about 20 students in a class). Half of 'this' (this to l. poj - a tutaj students to l. mnoga - THESE) students are girls and half ARE boys. To this school studEnts and teachers go DRESSED in their favourite clothes. Usually boys in loose slacks and 'blouses' (NIE, nie, shirts, - girls wear blouses, and boys wear shirts), and girls in miniskirts and t-shirts with big 'decolts' (chyba nie - to jest polskie slowo). The ideal school is safe, but
in 'they'(they to l. mnoga, a school to l. poj - in IT) 'aren't' (to lepiej w calosci are not) installed 'the' (lepiej any) cameras becAuse students must be free. 'physical and psyhical'-mysle, ze to niepotr.
Swimming pool, libary with computers, drink machines and smoking-room
are only some OF THE facilities iN A school of my dreamS.
The lessons aren't borning, teachers are AS open-minded as their pupils. Every topic is clear becAuse (BECAUSE) the teachers haVE (has to l. poj- a teachers to l. mnoga) explained everything.
After school A large part of students WOULD go home. 'Second' (a gdzie jest 'first'?) part usually boys 'go' (chyba HAVE) a school brawl between 'black and white' (takich okreslen juz nie uzywamy-moze lepiej the different races) - students of this school.
ThESE brawlS are of course top secret becAuse (BECAUSE) THEY ARE illegal and any teacher or 'other people' (lepiej anyone else) 'don't' (lepiej do not) know about thESE clashEs.

zauwazylam jeszcze ...libRARY....

sorki- zauwazylam ze tam oczywiscie ma byc ....BECAUSE piszemy z 'a'

Przepraszam za tekst wklejony w innym dziale.. To przez pomyłke;/
A Jeśli dobrze zrozumiałem to teraz powinno to wyglądać tak:

The ideal school is every student's dream. In that school students should feel a relaxed and go to it with pleasure. So in the idel school, it would only be the nice and understanding teachers teach.

Students ought not to come school sleepy. Lessons would start at 8.30 a.m. and end at 2 p.m. Breaks last are 15 minutes and a lessons 30. Teachers are sociable, creative and patient. They always help students with their problems. Each pupil has a computer and he/she study only what he/she wants. There would be about 20 students in a class. Half of these are girls and half are boys. To this school students and teachers go dressed in their favourite clothes. Usually boys in loose slacks and shirts, and girls in miniskirts and blouses. The idedal school is safe, but in it are not installed any cameras because students must be free.

A swimming pool, a library with computers, a drinks machines, and a smooking-room are only some of the facilities in a school of my dreams. It is a pleasure going to that school. The lessons aren't borning teachers are as open-minded as their pupils. Every topic is clear because the teachers have explained everything.

After school a first large part of students would go home. Second part usually boys have a school brawl between the different races students of this school. These brawls are of course top secret because they are illegal and any teacher or anyone else do not know about these clashes.

Zauwaz jeszcze te malenkie poprawki...
AN ideal school is ...
In that school THE students should feel relaxed and go THERE WITH PLEASURE. Also, the teachers who teach in the ideal school are nice and understanding

Breaks WOULD LAST...THE teachers are sociable, creative and patient.
Each pupil has a computer and he/she stuDIES only WHAT he/she wants.
Students and teachers wear their favourite clothes in this school.
The ideal school is safe but CAMERAS are not installed there because students SHOULD HAVE THE FEELING OF PHYSICAL AND MENTAL COMFORT.

It is a pleasure TO GO to that school. The lessons aren't boRING...
...A large part of THE students go home.
THE second part (nie mozesz powiedziec 'the second part'-to znaczy druga czesc -tutaj masz na mysli - inni, reszta - wtedy - 'the rest of' ...)
...usually boys have a school brawl between the different races OF students
IN this school.

Teraz to już powinno być dobrze:P Ale dla pewności proszę o ponowne sprawdzenie:) Wiadomo że można przeoczyć drobne błędy;)

An ideal school is every student's dream. In that school the students should feel a relaxed and go there with pleasure. Also, the teachers who teach in the ideal school are nice and understanding.

Students ought not to come school sleepy. Lessons would start at 8.30 a.m. and end at 2 p.m. Breaks would last are 15 minutes and a lessons 30. The teachers are sociable, creative and patient. They always help students with their problems. Each pupil has a computer and he/she study only what he/she wants. There would be about 20 students in a class. Half of these are girls and half are boys. Students and teachers wear their favourite clothes in this school. Usually boys in loose slacks and shirts, and girls in miniskirts and blouses. The idedal school is safe, but cameras are not installed there because studednts should have feeling of physical and mental comfort.

A swimming pool, a library with computers, a drinks machines, and a smooking-room are only some of the facilities in a school of my dreams. It is a pleasure to go to that school. The lessons aren't boring teachers are as open-minded as their pupils. Every topic is clear because the teachers have explained everything.

After school a large part of students would go home. The rest of students usually boys have a school brawl between the different races of students in this school. These brawls are of course top secret because they are illegal and any teacher or anyone else do not know about these clashes.

Half of these are girls.( and half are boys. >to wyrzucam bo fakt nie potrzebne:)

feel a relaxed - FEEL RELAXED
breaks would last are - BREAKS WOULD LAST
a lessons - LESSONS
he/ she study - HE/SHE STUDIES
usually boys in loose slacks - BOYS USUALLY WEAR LOOSE SLACKS
and girls in - AND GIRLS WEAR
should have feeling - SHOULD HAVE THE FEELING
a drinks machines - A DRINKS MACHINE albo DRINKS MACHINES
aren't boring teachers are - AREN'T BORING BECAUSE THE TEACHERS ARE
the rest of students usually boys have - THE REST OF THE STUDENTS, USUALLY THE BOYS, HAVE
and any teacher or anyone else do not know - brzmi dziwnie, sprawdz jeszcze raz moja poprawke tego zdania

znalazlam to:-
..In that school the students should feel 'a' (tutaj to 'a'jest niepotrz) relaxed
..Students ought not to come TO school sleepy.
..Breaks would last 'are' (nie rozumiem tego 'are' tutaj) 15 minutes and a lesson 30. (jak chesz napisac 'lessonS' to wtedy bez 'a')
..he/she studIES only what he/she wants.
..idedal (IDEAL) school is safe,
The lessons aren't boring BECAUSE teachers are as open-minded as their pupils
..students usually boys, (would) have a school brawl between
..or anyone else 'do not' (moze lepiej 'should not' know) know about these clashes.