Prosze o sprawdzenie opowiadania. Pilne - forum Pomoc językowa - Sprawdzenie

Otoz napisalem opowiadanie na temat: "Napisz opowiadanie z fabułą osnutą wokół tajemniczego zdarzenia zatytułowane The Lost Child". Mialem wykorzystac wiele struktur. Nie wiem czy mi to wyszlo. Bardzo serdecznie prosze o sprawdzenie moich wypocin.

It was a summer night. I glanced at my watch, it was nearly 11 p.m. I walked with my dog on his favourite path.
Suddenly I heard a rustle. I let my dog go first. He run up to the shrubs. I saw a young boy. He was so terrified that he was trying to escape but he had been caught by me. Even though I had questioned him about his name and what happened, he did not say a word. It is said that children should not talk with strangers but his behaviour was caused by fear. I took him to my house and gave him a cup of tea. After that he calmed down and decided to tell me his name – Andrew. When I asked what happened he became confused. Few minutes later he told he escaped from children’s home. I asked him why he did it. He did not explain it, but he said he wish he had not escaped. I decided to drive him back regardless of what he does, but to my surprise, when he heard that he started to cry for joy. As soon as possible I took him to car and thanks to his tips we managed to reach his home. We went to the head-teacher. I explained him whole situation. He was thankful for bringing back his pupil. After that I said goodbye to Andrew. He thanked me and told to visit him again.
I will not forget that story for the rest of my life.