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Every year the number of people who commit crimes is rising. We can notice people often grip a control their life and they do thing which are illegal and after they haven’t reproaches.
One of the reason of this situation is an increase in crime due to the problems at family. It is said that more and more children escape to crimes because before parents hadn’t seen them a correct instance. We can perceive that the children from rich home commit the crimes because they do it for feeling an adrenalin.
Another of the reason of this situation, which is especially mentioned by adults, is that people feel boundless. When they commit petty crimes as result they aren’t sentenced to the prison and in their opinion they can do everything what they want.
Nevertheless we can come across that crimes is on the decrease because there are a great deal of Institution which reduce the number of criminal. What is more we can become familiar with this problem on TV.
To my way of thinking it is needless to say that this problem exist however we should struggle and try find a salutation of this situation.
Every year the number of people who commit crimes is rising (mozna tez increasing).
We can notice THAT people often 'grip' (chyba zle slowo- popraw) a control their life and they do thingS which are illegal and after THAT they 'haven't' (lepiej 'do not have any', jak chcesz uzyc haven't, to haven't got any) reproaches.
One of the reasonS of this situation is an increase in crime due to the problems 'at' WITHIN THE family.
...It is said that more and more children escape to crimes because 'before parents hadn't seen them a correct instance' (cos z tym zdaniem nie tak)...moze prior to that time, the parents...dalej to nie wiem co chesz przekazac).
We can perceive that the children from rich homeS commit 'the' (niepotr) crimes because they do it for feeling OF an adrenalin RUSH.(ale co z 'children from poor homes...?)
Another of the reasonS (mozesz napisac ..'another reason') of this situation, which is especially mentioned by adults, is that people feel 'boundless' (zle slowo-).
When they commit petty crimes 'as result' (w zlym miejscu) they 'aren't' (nie uzywaj tego- ARE NOT sentenced to 'the' (niepotr) prison AS A RESULT and in their opinion they can do everything 'what' (nie zawsze polskie 'co' tlumaczymy na 'what'..tutaj THAT) they want.
Nevertheless we can come across (ale czego? tutaj brakuje....the view/the opinion) that 'crimes is' (ale 'is' odnosi sie do l. poj, a crimes to l. mnoga)on the decrease because there are a great 'deal' (lepiej NUMBER of InstitutionS which reduce the number of criminalS.
What is more we can become familiar with 'this problem' (ale jaki problem - musisz napisac) on TV.
To my way of thinking it is needless to say that this problem existS, however we should struggle and try TO find a 'salutation' (nie za bardzo - moze inne slowo) 'of' TO this situation.

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