poratujcie...

witam, siedzę nad tym descriptive essay już 3 h i przyznam nie idzie mi najlepiej.

mam co prawda wstępną pracę, ale jak zwyklę potrzebuję wskazówek i poprawek...


kto będzie tak uprzejmy?

proszę o sprawdzenie i ważniejsze: czy praca wgl ma sens i odpowiada na temat? bo ja po 3 godzinach zaczynam już w to wątpic :(
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THE USEFULNESS OF COMPUTERS IN EDUCATION

Together with technology’s expansion, the computers became one of the most important tools nowadays. Consequently began to look for its utility in the education and incontestably it proved to be useful. Why then, turned out to be valuable?
It is difficult to deny that now computer’s skills are required when looking for a job or just learning, so computers be used in self-training and also in studying.
When using a computer, especially Internet, students have access to whole world’s resources. On the one hand, it gives learners opportunity to find all sorts of information not available anywhere else without necessity to browse heaps of books. But on the other hand, unquestionable is the fact that, the desire to steal someone’s works, word in the word and cheat teachers increase, which is unethical and illegal.
According to growing number of interactive computer’s and long distance learning schools, when all contact between learners and teachers is totally impersonal and impossible, computers are necessity. This way of using computers in education seems to be comfortable and Opponents say, that it retakes occasion to interact with other people as teacher or learners, when contact is reduced to minimum and everything is discussed via mails without the ability to check students' progress.
All in all it seems, that besides computers’ positive traits, be used only as educational tool. What’s more they can not replace communication with real people, because life will become too automatic.

sorki tam w drugim akapicie w rozwinieciu miało byc :

comfortable BUT opponents...

poza tym widze że pozjadało mi akapity O.o'

co tam 3 godz? Gdybys siedziala tak pare dni - to dopiero...

Together with technology's expansion, the computers HAVE becOme one
of the most important tools nowadays. Consequently (ale kto? -tutaj cos brakuje)began to look for its utility in the education and 'incontestably' (cos nie tak...) 'it' (ale computers to l. mn) proved to be useful.
Why then, HAVE THEY turned out to be valuable?
It is difficult to deny that nowADAYS 'computer's' COMPUTER skills are required
when looking for a job or just learning, so computers 'be' ARE used in
self-training and also in studying.
When using a computer, especially THE Internet, students have access
to THE whole world's resources. On the one hand, it gives learners
AN opportunity to find all sorts of information not available anywhere
else without THE necessity to browse THROUGH heaps of books. But on the other
hand, unquestionable is the fact that, the desire to steal someone's
ELSES works, 'word in the word and' (nie-cos tu nie tak.nnapisz...leads to cheatING 'teachers increase' (niepotr), which is unethical and illegal.
According to A growing number of interactive 'computer's' (tutaj computer jako l. mn - computers) and long distance learning schools, when all contact between learners and teachers is totally impersonal and impossible, computers are
A necessity.

This way of using computers in education seems to be
comfortable and opponents say, that it 'retakes' (cos to slowo -?) occasion to interact with other people as teacherS or learners, when contact is reduced to
minimum and everything is discussed via mails without the ability to check students' progress. (To zdanie wydaje mi sie za dlugie - zrob z tego 2.)

All in all it seems, that besides computers' positive traits, TO be
used only as educational tool. (cos z tym zdaniem nie tak...Jak uzywasz 'besides' to musisz miec druga czesc tego)

ok dziękuję Terri, pozmieniam.

a jakie wrażenie ogolne sprawia praca ;>

pisz śmiało, krytykuj, błagam ;> ale napisz!.

jest ok, niekiedy mylisz sie z l. mn -s a z possessive 's.
Napisz wiecej takich tekstow, to tez poprawimy.

oj napewno jeszcze się zdarzy okazja poprosic was o sprawdzenie,

ogromnie mi zależy, żeby poprawic mój writing.



jeszcze raz wielkie dzięki :)