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Last week I was alone at home. I was doing my homework so I was really concetrating. Everything was very quiet. I switched off the telly and radio before I started. I wrote an essay about ghots when suddently I was hearing a loud noise from the kitchen. I gone to chek- the window was open! I thought someone locked the windows when I sat down to my homework. I felt scared. We live on the ground floor so anybody could get in through the window. I had just got up to investigate when my mobile was starting ringing. It was my parents. They were phoning me to say that they forgot to close the windows before leaving for the cinema and wanted me to close everything because a storm will come!

Moim zdaniem powinno być:
I HAD switched off the telly and radio before I started.

We live on the ground floor so anybody could get in through the window.

Nie powinno być everybody lub everyone? Bo Twoje zdanie brzmi "Mieszkaliśmy na parterze więc nikt nie mógł wejśc przez okno". Chyba mógł wejść:)

They were phoning me to say that they forgot to close the windows before leaving for the cinema and wanted me to close everything because a storm will come!

To zdanie powyżej jest za długie dlatego też cięzko napisać go poprawnie dla ludzi normalnych:)

They were phoning me to say they forgot to close the window before they HAD WENT OUT TO THE CINEMA. They said me to closed every window because a storm would come.

Dziękuję bardzo :)
Tak, tam powinno być everyone

I was really concentrated.
I had switched off the TV and the radio... ('telly'? nie mam tego słowa w słowniku;>)
I was writing ... I heard...
I went to check what was that...
when I was doing my homework
everybody(jak już wiecie;>)
when my mobile phone started ringing. It turned out that my parents were phoning me to say that they had forgotten to ...
would come(poza tym nie za bardzo pasuje mi jeszcze jedno zdanie, może jest dobrze, ale na Twoim miejscu lepiej napisałabym At once I had decided to find out what has happend when...)
/sorry za ewentualne mistakes;>/