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Even though the money have never been as essential for living as nowadays many people think that world without money might be better. However that opinion has many good points and drawbacks too.
There is no denying that living in the world, where any money isn’t has a number of advantages. First of all, people mustn’t be money-hungry. As a result they may have more time for telling their kids bed-time stories.
Secondly we’ll avoid stress, which is inextricable connected with everyday problem how to makes both ends meet, so our physical and mental state will be better.
Another advantage is that a lack of money is tantamount to decreasing a number of crimes, because if there won’t be any money people mustn’t steal.
Although not having money makes us better it has some disadvantages too. The main drawback –that situation may cause that unemployment will be high, especially bankers won’t be able to work, because there won’t be any banks.
One argument against is that people won’t pay any taxes, so economy won’t develop, which result in not building new roads, bridges etc.
Another problem is that scientists won’t invent vaccines and medicaments for dangerous treatments, because it is very expensive. A number of ill people will increase.
To sum up it can be stated that money are important in everyday life. View that if won’t be money world will be better has as many drawbacks as positive aspects.

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Dziękuję, przepraszam że tak męczę ale to dla mnie sprawa życia i śmierci.

Even though money HAS never BEFORE been as essential for living as IT IS
nowadays, many people think that THE world without money might be better.

There is no denying that living in the world WITHOUT MONEY
has a number of advantages.

Zmieniam wszystko na would, bo piszesz o tym jak świat wyglądałBY bez $$.

First of all, people WOULD NOT be (mustn't be = nie powinni być)money-hungry.

As a result, they WOULD have more time for telling their
kids bed-time stories.

Secondly, we WOULD avoid stress, which is inextricablY connected with
>everyday problemS how to makes both ends meet, so our physical and
>mental state WOULD be better.

Another advantage OF LIVING IN THE WORLD WITHOUT MONEY is that THE NUMBER OF ROBBERIES WOULD DECREASE because THERE WOULD NOT be any money TO STEAL.

The main drawback that situation may cause is that unemployment
WOULD be high; bankers especially WOULD NOT be able to work because there
WOULD NOT be any banks.

One argument against THE WORLD WITHOUT MONEY is that people WOULD NOT pay any taxes, so economy WOULD NOT develop which WOULD result in not building new roads, bridges, or buildings.

Another problem is that scientists WOULD NOT invent vaccines OR
MEDICINE for LIFE-THREATENING DISEASES because it is very expensive. A
>number of ill people WOULD increase.

To sum up, it can be stated that money IS important in
>everyday life. THE view that THE WORLD WITHOUT MONEY WOULD be better has as
>many drawbacks as positive aspects.

Bardzo Ci dziękuję, jeśli mogłabyś sprawdzić jeszcze mój opinion essay, który zaraz wstawię będę ci stokrotnie wdzięczna. Po prostu już mi się wszystko w głowie miesza bo cały dzień piszę rozprawki, opowiadania itp.
Dzięki za zrozumienie

Oto mój opinion essay
Nowadays people often leave their town or country for long period of time, so friendships are often put to the test. It is my belief that when people live far away each other, their friendships died.
Firstly a long distance makes good contact with our friend impossible, because it is reduced to phone calls, text message and email. It is too little to maintain a good relation with another person.
Secondly when we change a whereabouts it is high likelihood that we will find new friends and old won’t be needed for example go to university is often connected with new environment and acquaintances and we rare keep in touch with colleagues from secondary school.
Thirdly we are running out of time, so if we are miles away our friends we haven’t time for them. As a result we don’t meet them for weeks, months, years and finally our relation died.
On the other hand many people think that real friendship will endure every test. What is more they their view is that longing for friend makes their relation stronger.
To sum up in my opinion it is very dangerous to expose a friendship for such a difficult test as a long distance. I am fully convinced that do this our friendship will end up.

Nowadays people often leave their town or country for A long
period of time, so friendships are often put to the test.

It is my
>belief that when people live far away FROM each other, their friendships
>DIE.



Secondly when we change OUR whereabouts, THERE IS high likelihood
>that we will find new friends and THE old ONES won't be needed. For example going to university is often connected with new environment and
>acquaintances and we rareLY keep in touch with colleagues from secondary
>school.


> Thirdly we ARE ALWAYS BUSY AND DO NOT HAVE MUCH time, so if we are miles away FROM
>our friends we WON'T HAVE time for them.

As a result we don't meet them
>for weeks, months, years and finally our relationship DIES.

> On the other hand many people think that A real friendship will
>endure every test.

What is more their view is that MISSING A
>friend makes their relation stronger.

> To sum up, in my opinion it is very dangerous to expose a
>friendship TO such a difficult test as a long distance. I am fully
>convinced that BY DOING this, our friendship will end.

Dzięki wielkie, nie wiem jak się odwdzięczę:)

Sorki pomyliłam post ale tak przy okazji może mogłabyś Eva zerknąc na moje opowiadanie?

Dzięki Eva:)

Przepraszam ,ze tez tak głowę zawracam,ale mogłabyś zerknąć na moją straszną historię?Będę bardzo wdzięczna ;*