Speech - sprawdzenie

Witam ! Proszę o sprawdzenie fragmentu 'przemówienia':) temat : muzyka łagodzi obyczaje ...
I have chosen this topic , beacuse it it a timeless issue .

' Music sooths' .
Ladies and Getlemann , I am absolutely convinced that the music takes a significant position in your lifes . Apply to common opinion from time immemorial a human has expressed feelings , experiences and fears by melodies , which he created .
The conteporary men also escapes to "world of sounds" .
I would like start from the personal exeriences .When my grand-mom stayed in hospital , because of heart attack , she asked us for a radio . She claimed that , when she hears the music , forget about ailments and feels more cheerful. It stimulates her to positive thinking .
The music played very important role in 70' and 80' years of XX centuary , when established the "Solidarnosc" . The song " Żeby Polska była Polską " by "Elita" or "Mury" by Jacek Kaczmarski helped in battle of changing a political system .
Nowaydays , only the first tone of that masterpieces gives us optimism and conviction of rightness our accomplishments .
I would like to focus my attantion on songs , whch were written in tragic situations . It includes terrorist attack (11th September) in USA . Wojciech Kilar , a polish composer of classic music , when the whole world was terrified , produced "Sempetebr Symphony" , which shows not only a condemnation , but orders to belive in goodness .
Every person has moments of sadness , doubts or sorrow . I think that a lot of adolescents find consolation in music . In many places we can see people with headsets . They "leave" cares and troubles ( poza sobą )

dziękuję za każdą pomoc ;)

' Music sooths' (napisz to inaczej...Music sooths the savage beast).
I am absolutely convinced that 'the' (niepotr) music takes a significant position in your 'lifes' (nie tak piszemy l. mnoga od 'life' poszukaj). ApplyING 'to' (niepotr) common opinion from time immemorial a human has expressed feelings , experiences and fears by melodies, which he HIMSELF HAD created .
The 'conteporary'(ortog) 'men' (tutaj l. poj - MAN) also escapes to THE "world of sounds" .
I would like start from 'the' (niepotr) personal 'exeriences'(ortog) .When my 'grand-mom' (nie, lepiej 'grandma') stayed in hospital, because of (tu cos brakuje) heart attack, she asked us for a radio . She claimed that, when she hears the music, (KTO? musisz tu napisac) forgetS about (ale czyje-musisz tu napisac) ailments and feels more cheerful. It stimulates her toWARDS positive
thinking .
The music played (tu cos brakuje) very important role in (tu cos brakuje) '70'' (tego tak nie piszemy, piszemy ...'70s) and '80s' years of (tu cos brakuje) XX 'centuary'(ortog), when 'established the "Solidarnosc"' (napisz to inaczej...Sol. was established, i musisz dodac, ze to bylo w Polsce-zeby bylo jasno dla twoich sluchaczy). The song "Żeby Polska była Polską"(musisz to przetlumaczyc na ang) by "Elita" or "Mury"(musisz to przetlumaczyc na ang) by Jacek Kaczmarski helped in (tu cos brakuje) battle of changing 'a' (niestety nie ten) political system (napisz gdzie, nie wszyscy wiedza).
Nowaydays, only the first 'tone' NOTE of 'that' THOSE (bo ich bylo 2) masterpieces gives us optimism and conviction of 'rightness' (to slowo nie istnieje w jez ang-poszukaj poprawne i napisz) our accomplishments.
I would like to focus my 'attantion' (ortog) on songs , 'whch' (ortog) were written in tragic situations (tez mozna 'circumstances'). 'It' (ale to sie odnosi do 'songs' a songs' to l. mnoga, tutaj trzeba l. mn) includes THE (napisz tutaj 911) terrorist attack (ON THE 11th September) in USA . Wojciech Kilar, a Polish (duza litera) composer of classicAL music, 'when the whole world was terrified' (daj to na koncu zdania) , produced "'Sempetebr' (ortog) Symphony" (daj tutaj AT A time when the whole ....), which 'shows' (daj lepsze slowo np demonstrates') not only 'a' (niepotr) condemnation , but 'orders' (zle slowo-poszukaj inne) to 'belive' (ortog) in goodness .
I think that a lot of adolescents find consolation in music (mozna dodac...as they have always done).
They "leave" (tu cos brakuje) cares and troubles ( poza sobą-behind)

terri, my spidey senses are starting to tingle...
::))

sorry, ale chcialam sobie przypomniec czyje to bylo powiedzenie i jakos mi do glowy nie przychodzi. Wiem, ze byl to wiersz, napewno jednego z Romantykow.

znalazlam. To byla Almera Act1, Sc1 w 'The Mourning Bride' - Congreve.
a cytat byl:
'Music hath charms to soothe a savage breast, to soften rocks, or bend a knotted oak'.
'Beast niekiedy pomylony z breast'.
Ale bede szukala dalej w Romantykach.