It happened on the day of...

Uwaga! Mam do sprawdzenia straszną historię :D
Inspiracje czerpałem z piosenki "Dance of death" Iron Maiden ;)
życzę miłego sprawdzania ;)


It happened on the day Monday. It was full moon on the sky. I went for a walk and the moon lighted my road. I’m gazing up at the stars. When suddenly I heard shout from forest I entered to this forest and I went further, I felt scared because I had a constant fear that something's always near. Suddenly someone hurt me and took me to strange place. It was terrible. There was bonfire and I saw the Death. She was skeleton and she had knife. Round here were another people. The people looked strange, they had red eyes, and they were wounded, they looked like zombie. They started dance, and I danced and I sang with them, it was trance. The Death looking me and she invited me to dance, she said “Come to me and dance with Me!” . I did not want but my body was in trance, and it dance with death. I smell her, and I looked on her eyes, they were glassy and ghastly. About six or ten minutes late I finished dance with Death. I felt me body and I ran like hell faster than the wind. I stopped the car and I went home.

Prosze uzywac przedimkow tam gdzie potrzeba. Bez tego zdania sa niegram.

It happened 'on the day' (po co to? Czy po polsku tez mowisz" Stalo to sie w dzien Poniedzialek? No, moze tak, ale to jest niepopr) Monday. 'It' THERE was (przedimek) full moon 'on' (zle slowo) the sky. I went for a walk and the moon 'lighted' LIT my road. 'I'm' (zle wczesniejsze zdanie daje mi znac, ze to jest czas przeszly, to jak to?) gazing up at the stars. When suddenly I heard (przedimek) shout from (przedimek) forest I entered 'to' (niepotr) this forest and I went further, I felt scared because I had a constant fear that something's
'always' (po co to?) near. Suddenly someone hurt me and took me to 9przedimek) strange place.
There was (przedimek) bonfire and I saw 'the Death' (nie rozumiem co chcesz powiedziec tutaj). She was (przedimek)skeleton and she had (przedimek) knife. Round 'here' ABOUT were 'another' (zle slowo) people. The people looked
strange, they had red eyes, and they were wounded, they looked like
'zombie' (ale przeciez 'people' to l. mnoga, dlaczego uzyles zombie-l. poj). They started (tu cos brakuje) dance, and I danced and I sang with them, it was
(przedimek) trance. 'The' (niepotr) Death 'looking' (czas przeszly) (tu cos brakuje) me and she invited me to dance, she said “Come to me and dance with Me!" . I did not want (tu cos brakuje) but my body was in (przedimek) trance, and it 'dance' (zla czesc mowy) with death. I 'smell' (zly czas) her, and I looked 'on' (zle slowo) her eyes, they were glassy and ghastly. About six or ten minutes 'late' (zle slowo) I finished (tu cos brakuje) dance with Death. I felt 'me' (zle slowo) body and I ran like hell faster than the wind. I stopped 'the' (zly przedimek) car and I went home.

dzięki wielkie ;)