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Dear Jane,
Thank you for your letter. I’m very lucky that I can stay with us during my English course. Don’t worry, I’m sure, I’ll have a good time during a visit in England.
I’m arriving at Gatwick airport at 4 p.m. I can get a train to Brighton, I checked already timetable. I’ll have immediate train at 4.30 p.m. I now also that distant between airport and station is about 10 minute by foot. So I’ll make it to train. I have a mobile home, but it’s a problem with roaming. My dad gave one’s word that he see about it. I’ll call to you when I’m on the train like you invite me. I very happy that you want welcome me at the station.
People say me that I’m very friendly and helpful. If you have a dog I’ll be able to go for a walk with it. I like an animals. I’m polite and reliable. I like traditional English food for example Shepherd's Pie or Steak and Kidney Pie. I don’t have any allergy. I don’t smoke, because lead a healthy life style. I jog every day before breakfast.
It doesn’t meter witch room I’ll receive. I’m sociable, so a roommate won’t handicap me. I think I’ll go back to Poland immediately after the end of course, because I’ll began a school in September.
Looking forward to hearing from you
Best wishes
Ola S
P.S. I’m sending you photo of my so you’ll recognize me at the station.




Nie chodzi o samą treść tyle co o sprawdzenie błędów gramatycznych i językowych :)

kogo masz namysli by us? to tak na poczatek sobie popraw :)
Potem i'll have a good time visiting England- brzmi more english like moim zdaniem
I ahve already checked the timetable
I have an immediate train
I also know that the distance( distant to jest przymiotnik)between the airport and the station(wiemy o jakim lotnisku i stacji mowa)is (tutaj kilometry) which will take like 10 minutes by foot- cos tego typu bym tu wsadził.
I have a mobvile phone but there's a problem.....
My dad gave one’s word that he see about it. - nie rozumiem co chciałas przekazac alke to jest nieprawidłowo
I’m on the train like you invite me. rowniez nie wiem o co chodzilo ale jest zle
im very happy
People say....bez me
If you have a dog ill be able to go for a walk with it(ill be able- tutaj niepasuje chyba , ze chcesz podkreslic ze jestes na tyle sprawna zeby to zrobic:D )
I like animals
Im not allergic
i live healthy lifestyle
It doesnt matter which room i get
so a roommate wont bother me
I start school at sptmb
A photo of me so that you recognize me:)
To by było na tyle pozdrawiam

I’m very lucky that I can stay with 'us' (popraw) during my English course. Don’t worry, I’m sure, I’ll have a good time during 'a' (zly przedimek) visit in England.
I can get a train to Brighton, I 'checked already' (zla kol slow) (brak przedimka) timetable. I’ll have 'immediate' (nie rozumiem po co to slowo tutaj jest) (brak przedimka) train at 4.30 p.m. I 'now' (now to znaczy 'teraz' o czym mowa?) also that (brak przedimka) 'distant' (zla czesc mowy) between (brak przedimka) airport and (brak przedimka) station is about 10 minuteS by foot.
I have a mobile 'home' ('home' to znaczy 'dom' tutaj o jakim 'domu' mowa?), but 'it’s' (zle slowo, tutaj 'there's) a problem with roaming. My dad gave 'one’s' (po jakiej chol uzywasz tego 'one' nawet nie znajac w ogole jak to sie uzywa-) (tutaj powinno byc 'his') word that he WILL see about it. I’ll call 'to' (niepotr) you when I’m on the train like you 'invite me' (to jest zle, nie mam pojecia o co chodzi). I (tu brakuje czasownika) very happy that you want TO welcome me at the station.
People say OF me that I’m very friendly and helpful.
I like 'an' (a dlaczego dajesz przedimek 'an' przed l. mnoga? Gdzie to tak sie nauczylas?) animals.
I don’t have any allergIES. I don’t smoke, because (ale kto? ja, tu? pies? kot?) lead a healthy life style.
It doesn’t 'meter' (to jest zle slowo) 'witch' (to jest zle slowo) room I’ll 'receive' (to jest za wysokie slowo tutaj, wystarczy 'get').
I think I’ll go back to Poland immediately after the end of (brak przedimka) course, because 'I’ll' (napisz to w calosci i zrozumiesz gdzie jest blad) 'began' (zla forma) 'a' (niepotr) school in September.
I’m sending you (brak przedimka) photo of 'my' (zle slowo, tutaj MYSELF) so THAT you’ll recognize me at the station.

PO POPRAWKACH

Thank you for your letter. I’m very lucky that I can stay with you during my English course. Don’t worry, I’m sure, I’ll have a good time, when I’ll be in England.I’m arriving at Gatwick airport at 4 p.m. I can get a train to Brighton, I have already checked the timetable. I’ll have a train at 4.30 p.m. I also know that the distance between an airport and a station is about 1km which will take like 10 minutes by foot. I have a mobile phone but it has a problem with roaming. My dad promise that he’ll see about it. I’ll call you when I’m on the train like you beg me. I’m very happy that you want to welcome me at the station.
People say of me that I’m very friendly and helpful. If you have a dog, I’ll go for a walk with it, if you want. I like animals. I’m polite and reliable. I like traditional English food for example Shepherd's Pie or Steak and Kidney Pie. I don’t have any allergies. I don’t smoke, because I lead a healthy life style. I jog every day before breakfast.
It’s meaningless with who I’ll get a room. I’m sociable, so a roommate won’t bother me. I think I’ll go back to Poland immediately after a course, because I begin school in September.
Looking forward to hearing from you
Best wishes
Ola S
P.S. I’m sending you a photo of myself so you’ll recognize me at the station.


Czy coś jeszcze jest źle??

Aha i bardzo dziękuje za pomoc, wasze uwagi wiele mi pomogły, pokazały nad czym jeszcze muszę popracować i na co zawracać większą uwagę. :) nie wiem skąd mi się wkręcił mobile home... XD chodziło o tel. kom. :D