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Dear Sir or Madam:

With this letter, I would like to express my interest in studying at the Erasmus Program.

I am currently studying National Security in Adam Mickiewicz University in Poznan. Having looked through the materials of the Foreign Department of my university, I was very delighted to find the opportunity to spend one semester learning my subject at foreign Universities. I have decided to apply for this program because I am sure it would strongly enrich my future studies and help me in my prospective career. Moreover I consider this program as a great opportunity to get in touch with foreign culture and educational system. Last but not least, I am very curious about different approaches to the Critical Management at the foreign university.

During my prior studies I have found out, that I would like to specialize in Critical Management. The Erasmus Program gives me a chance to get in touch with these subjects on foreign Universities and shows me how to other cultures perceive this issue. I am also very interested in study Defense System from other countries and see new innovations, ideas which they decided to introduce. Moreover I am a member of scientific group in Adam Mickiewicz University so it will be great opportunity to share our knowledge with foreign students. We can also exchange opinions about subjects which we are interested in.

I would very much like to spend one semester at the Erasmus Program. This would give me a chance to deepen my knowledge in the inspiring, creative, and cosmopolite environment. Furthermore I could improve my English and increase my confidence in passing the TOEFL examinations after I return. Moreover, I am confident that my experience in Sheffield would be extremely exciting, fun, and valuable for both my studies and overall general development.

Thank you for considering my request. I look forward to your positive response.

Yours faithfully,
Oskar Kozikowski

Dear Sir or Madam:

With this letter, I would like to express my interest in studying at the Erasmus Program.

I am currently studying National Security at Adam Mickiewicz University in Poznan. Having looked through the materials of the Foreign Department of my university, I was very delighted to find the opportunity to spend one semester learning my subject at foreign Universities. I have decided to apply for this program because I am sure it would strongly enrich my future studies and help me in my prospective career. Moreover, I consider this program as a great opportunity to explore a foreign culture and a different educational system. Last but not least, I am very curious about various approaches to the Critical Management at the foreign university.

During my prior studies, I have found out that I would like to specialize in Critical Management. The Erasmus Program gives me a chance to examine these subjects at foreign Universities and shows me how other cultures perceive this issue. I am also very interested in studying Defense Systems of other countries and explore new innovations and ideas they decided to introduce. Moreover I am a member of a scientific group at Adam Mickiewicz University so this will be a great opportunity to share our knowledge with foreign students. We can also exchange opinions about subjects in which we are interested.

I would very much like to spend one semester at the Erasmus Program. This would give me an opportunity to deepen my knowledge in the inspiring, creative, and cosmopolite environment. Furthermore, I could improve my English and increase my confidence in passing the TOEFL examination after I return. Moreover, I am confident that my experience in Sheffield would be extremely exciting, fun and valuable for both my studies and overall general development.

Thank you for considering my request. I look forward to your positive response.

Yours faithfully,
Oskar Kozikowski

'With this letter' (calkowicie nie rozumiem po co to jest napisane), I would like to express my interest in studying 'at' ON the Erasmus ProgramME.

I am currently studying 'National Security' (cos mi to dziwnie wyglada - ) 'in' AT Adam Mickiewicz University in Poznan. 'Having looked through the materials of the Foreign Department of my university' (nie rozumiem po co taka bajka jak co i gdzie - tutaj nie piszesz reportaz, tutaj ma byc SCISLE i do TEMATU)i, I was very delighted to find 'the opportunity to spend' THAT AN OPPoRTUNITY EXISTS FOR one semester learning my subject at foreign Universities. I have decided to apply for this programME (PROGRAMME ) because I am sure it would strongly enrich my future studies and help me in my prospective career. Moreover I consider this programME as a great opportunity to get in touch with foreign culture and THE educational system. 'Last but not least' (absolutnie niepotr), I am very curious about THE different approaches to 'the' (niepotr) Critical Management at 'the' A foreign university.

During my prior studies I 'have found out' (tutaj trzeba uzywac slowo z 'wyzszej' polki...DISCOVERED), that I would like to specialize in Critical Management. The Erasmus ProgramME gives me a chance to get in touch with these subjects 'on' (to jest kalka z polskiego 'na' ale studiuje sie AT) foreign Universities and 'shows me how to' ASCERTAIN HOW other cultures perceive this issue. I am also very interested in THE study OF THE Defense System 'from other countries' (niepotr) and see new innovations AND ideas which they HAVE decided to introduce. 'Moreover' (niepotr, te wszystkie zaczynajace slowa wygladaja za bardzo po polsku, lepiej od razu do tematu, troche asertywnosci)) I am a member of A scientific group 'in' AT 'Adam Mickiewicz' (niepotr, juz wyzej pisales o tym, tutaj MY) University, so it will be great opportunity to share 'our' (od kiedy 'our' tutaj MY) knowledge with foreign students. 'We can also exchange opinions about subjects which we are interested in' (po co to - tego nie rozumiem).

I would very much like to spend one semester at the Erasmus ProgramME. This would give me a chance to deepen my knowledge in the inspiring, creative, and cosmopolitAN environment. 'Furthermore I could improve my English and increase my confidence in passing the TOEFL examinations after I return' (tego bym nawet nie pisala, bo to daje znac, ze twoj ang. nie jest na wysokim poziomie, a w gruncie rzeczy ty chcesz studiowac na ang. UNi - to twoj poziom powinnien byc juz wysoki) 'Moreover' (niepotr), I am confident that my experience 'in' AT Sheffield (daj tutaj nazwe University) would be extremely exciting, 'fun' (o tym to sie nie pisze, oni nie chca ludzi ktorzy mysla, ze Uni jest 'fun') and valuable for both my studies and overall general development.

Thank you for considering my request. I look forward to your 'positive' (tego sie nie pisze w listach motyw) response.

A teraz, tutaj mi brakuje twoich osiagniec, czym sie mozesz pochwalic, wynikow ktore osiagnales - cos co wyroznia Ciebie od wszystkich innych ludzi ktorzy tez beda na ten programme sie starali.

Do tego, masz problemy z przedimkami.