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Last summer I spent with my best friend Amy. We know each other for a very long time. We are like sisters. We were going to spent a month at my grandparents cottage in California. It seemed to be the best summer in our life!
Unfortunately Amy’s dad was sick, so he couldn’t drive us there, so we decided to go there by train. Journey was very long, but we weren’t bored of it. All the time we were talking about California. We were so excited! At one moment Amy went to the toilet , I phoned to my parents to say that everything is all right. I was so surprised, when she came back in different clothes! She didn’t take anything there. She asked me: “Do you mind if I sit here?” It was strange. I thought that she lost her mind. Then she talked that her name is Jenny, not Amy. In this moment my friend came back. She looked at Jenny, then like me. It was really weird situation. I have never seen a girl, which was so alike to Amy! What’s more then it turned out that Jenny was born at the same day in the same hospital like her!
A month later Amy and Jenny did a DNA test, which prove that they are twins! They were separated at birth. It was amazing coincidence that they meet!

'Last summer I spent' (napisz to inaczej...I spent last summer) with my best friend Amy. We HAVE knowN each other for a very long time.
Unfortunately Amy’s dad was sick, 'so' (daj tutaj 'and') he couldn’t drive us there, so we decided to go there by train. (przedimek) journey was very long, but we weren’t bored 'of it' (wg mnie niepotr).
I thought that she HAD lost her mind. Then she 'talked' SAID that her name is Jenny, not Amy. 'In' AT this moment my friend came back. She looked at Jenny, then 'like' (to jest zle slowo) me. It was (przedimek) really weird situation.
What’s more then it turned out that Jenny was born at the same day in the same hospital JUST like her!
A month later Amy and Jenny did a DNA test, which prove that they 'are' WERE twins!
It was (przedimek) amazing coincidence that they 'meet' (zly czas, tutaj przeszly)