Poprawcie mi błędy w personal statemencie proszę!

proszę was bardzo ładnie o pomoc w poprawieniu błędów w moim PS chodzi mi tylko o budowe zdań i gramatykę błagam! sowicie wynagrodzę gorącymi podziękowaniami i pochlebstwami na całą stronę! :P

Everything has started from the book "A question of Honour"By Lynne Olson and Stanley Cloud. My whole interest in aviation began from a story of WWII pilots. I was fascinated with their skills, that's why i decided to join the air force at first, however as I'm more pacifist person i have changed my mind for civil aviation. Back in my country becoming a pilot was very hard actually, in times i was teenager there were only two ways to sit behind the stick-air force or private lessons. To get to the air force apart from skills, knowledge and fitness candidate must had quite big wallet and 'know people' that was a bad habit after communism in my country. I couldn't afford for private lessons either, but my passion was growing up and i had to find the way to fly.
This chapter of my life i like to call "From paper to the skies". I had started to build model air planes. First just easy simple paper air planes but then i went to the library for some guidance. I did build quite few little air planes using paper, wood and polystyrene but i was hoping for longer flights than 30 seconds. I destroyed my brothers little toy car and took the small electric engine out after few hours my new aircraft was ready to fly!And obviously dropped down like a stone...even if my brother beat me to the ground for his beloved car it was worth trying.
After few months we had moved to UK because of our financial situation. My English was so poor that i couldn't even ask for burger in McDonald's. I was quite confused and i didn't know what to do, young alone in the new country. I decided to go to the college, my parents didn't earn to much but it was still better than in my country, the whole migration was sad for me and i almost forgot about flying. After a while things start to change, i had improved my language,we've moved to different town and it was close to the air club.
I applied for college but because i didn't have English qualifications they just let me do First diploma course, but after first week when i did maths and English tests they decided to transfer me to National level I was happy and proud, but to be honest i was also lost in what I'm going to do after this-The answer was obvious i wanted to fly. Last year i helped four students from other country who came to study in UK and they didn't have place to stay for few days so i offered them a shelter. I went to the university with them and then i had found out about the course "Air Transport With Commercial Pilot Training".
My excitement was hard to describe. But it also bring me a lot of thinking.Am I actually able to do it? Can i afford it?Pilot job brings a lot of responsibility, it could be very stressful and requires a lot of confidence. Am i the right person?I think I'm, my life so far, was full of different experiences from which i tell I'm responsible person and can stay in control in emergency situations.In my college I've done kayaking, high roping and climbing. Through the training when i had to belay my colleagues or rescue them from freezing cold water i think i showed a lot of confidence and self-organisation.
I'm also a very quick learning, multi-skill person what my language and work experience can proof. At the age of four i have learn to play chess, i can play four instruments communicate in three languages: Polish, English and Russian, and everything comparing with the view of the"ocean of clouds" ispretty much meaningless
At the moment, to gain some experience i signed up for gliding course. It is my first serious step in my pilot career and i hope it is not going to be the last.

To jest za dlugie. Niewiem, czy masz napisany 'limit slow' - ale to musi sie w tym limicie miescic. Prosze nie pisac co kto, kiedy i jak powiuedzial, ale przekonac mnie dlaczego wlasnie tobie a nie komus innemu mamy dac to miejsce.

'Everything' (napisz to inaczej....My whole interest in aviation 'has' (niepotr) started from the book "A question of Honour" By Lynne
Olson and Stanley Cloud. 'My whole interest in aviation began from a
story of WWII pilots' (niepotr). I was fascinated BY THE STORIES OF THE WWII pilots, BY THEIR SKILLS 'with their skills' (niepotr) AND that's why 'i' DLACZEGO 'i' jest mala litera?) decided to join the Air Force. 'at first' (niepotr). However as 'I'm' (prosze w calosci) 'more' A pacifist person 'i' juz niechce tego malego 'i' widziec!!) 'have' (niepotr) changed my mind (tutaj cos brakuje ...and opted) for civil aviation.
'Back in my country' (niepotr) Becoming a pilot (tutaj napisz date kiedy) was very hard. 'actually' (co to dlowo dodaje - niepotr), WHEN 'in times' (niepotr) 'i' (juz nic nie mowie o tym) I was A teenager there were only two 'ways' OPTIONS 'to sit' EITHER SIT behind the 'stick-air force' (tego nie rozumiem) or GO FOR private lessons. 'To get to the air force' (nie - TO OBTAIN A PLACE) apartt from skills A CANDIDATE HAD TO HAVE knowledge and fitness. A candidate 'must had' HAD TO BE WEALTHY. 'quite big wallet' (i to piszesz w perseonal statement- to jest lekcja historii kraju) and 'know people' (ale jakich, sasiadow, kolegow z lawy szkolnej, kogo? napisz to inaczej) 'that was
a bad habit after communism in my country' (Historia jest znana, chyba nie musisz ja powtarzac.). I couldn't afford 'for' (niepotr) private lessons 'either' (niepotr), but my passion was 'growing up' (passion NIGDY nie grows up - passion INCREASES) and 'i' had to find 'the way to fly' AN ALTERNATIVE WAY.
'This chapter of my life 'i' like to call "From paper to the skies"' (czy to ma byc poczastek jhakiejs ksiazki ktora masz zamiar pisac - to jest niepotr). I
'had' (niepotr) started to build model airplanes. AT first 'just' (niepotr) easy simple paper air planes but then 'i' went to the library for some guidance' (nie chycemy wiedziec co robniles kazdego dnia, i ze prxzeczytales taka a taka ksiazke - co to ma do tematu) I PROGRESSED. I 'did' (niepotr)
build 'quite few little' (niepotr) air planes using paper, wood and polystyrene
'but' (niepotr) 'i' (j/w) I 'was' (niepotr) hopED for longer flights than 30 seconds. 'I destroyed my brothers little toy car and' (nhiepotr) I took 'the' A small electric engine out AND 'after few hours' (niepotr) my new aircraft was ready to fly! And obviously dropped down like a stone...'even if my brother beat me to the ground for his' beloved car it was worth trying' (bardzo ladnie ale czy to w jakis sposob mnie przekona dlaczego powinnienes studiowac???).
'After few months we had moved to UK because of our financial situation' WE RELOCVATED TO THE UK. 'My English was so poor that i couldn't even ask for burger in McDonald's' (niepotr). I was 'quite' (niepotr) confused and 'i' didn't know what to do. 'young alone in the new country' (tak jak tysiace innych - co robi ciebie nadzwyczajnym). I 'decided to go to the' WENT TO college. 'my parents didn't earn to much but it was still better than in my
country, the whole migration was sad for me and i almost forgot about
flying'(niepotr). 'After a while things start to change' (niepotr), I 'had' (niepotr) improved my language. 'we've moved to different town and it was close to the air club' (niepotr).
I applied 'for' TO THE college 'but' Niepotr -cale nastepne zdanie jest niepotr) 'because i didn't have English qualifications they just let me do First diploma course, but after first week when i did maths and English tests they decided to transfer me to National level I was happy and proud, but to be honest i was also lost in what 'm going to do after this' (cale zdanie niepotr) AND OBTAINED MY NATIONAL LEVEL. (ale niewiem w czym?)-
'The answer was obvious' (nie dla mnie.niepotr) BUT 'i' wanted to fly.
...Last year 'i' 'helped' ASSISTED four students 'from other country who came to study in UK and they didn't have place to stay for few days so i offered
them a shelter.....Co to ma do tematu dlaczego chcesz byc przyjety - to jest historia twojego zycia, a nie PERSONAL SATATEMENT)
I went to the university 'with them and then i had' (niepotr) AND OBTAINED DETAILS 'found out about' OF the course "Air Transport With Commercial Pilot
Training".