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Napisz opowiadanie, w którym wystepuje zdanie 'What was going to be a quiet restful evening turned into hectic and exciting one'.
Last year in the summer I worked as river guide on the river called 'Blue eye'. My work was to bring people into another side. It was dangerous expecially for those who no experience. In the middle of June we had special guests in our camp. There were mainly buisnessmen who wanted to face new adventure which would close them and improve their futher work together in the company. We trained them in the case of difficult situations on the river. After three days we were ready to face this challenge. Unfortunately, our plans were damaged by terrible storm. I canceled our trip. The buisnessmen were not glad about that and one of them told me:'We employed you so you have to listen us'. I was sure it was ridiculous although my partner insisted on me and I agreed. Despite it was long after storm, the river has not been peaceful yet. What was going to be a quiet peaceful evening turned into hectic and exciting one. During trip one of passengers did not put on his life jacket and when we were going through the most dangerous part of the river he fell into water. I also jumped to help him. We took him on the boat but he did not breath so I did him a heart massage. After a while he regained consciousness and ambulance took him to hospital. A paramedic said to me:'You saved his life' but his words did not bring me a relief. Then I took two weeks off to forget about this unpleasant accident.
Według mnie praca napisana jest poprawnie, aczkolwiek jest to jedynie moja opinia:P
Last year in the summer I worked as A river guide on the river called 'Blue Eye'. I shipped people FROM ONE BANK OF THE RIVER into another. It was dangerous expecially for those who hHAVE no experience. In the middle of June we had special guests in our camp. There were mainly buisnessmen who wanted to face THE new adventure which would close them and improve their futher work together in the company. We trained them in case of difficult situations on A river. After three days we were ready to face this challenge. Unfortunately, our plans were SHATTERED [niweczyć] by A terrible storm. I canceled our trip. The buisnessmen were not HAPPY about that and one of them told me:'We employed you so you have to listen TO us'. I was sure it was ridiculous although my partner insisted on me and I agreed. Despite THE FACT THAT it was long after THE storm, the river REMAINED ROUGH. What was going to be a quiet peaceful evening turned into THE hectic and exciting one. During THE trip one of THE passengers did not put on his life jacket and when we were going through the most dangerous part of the river he fell into THE water. I also (??? ktoś jeszcze skoczył oprócz Ciebie? Napisz bez ALSO) jumped to help him. We took him on the boat but he did not breathE so I RESUSCITATED HIM. After a while he regained consciousness and AN ambulance took him to hospital. A paramedic said to me: 'You saved his life' but I DIDN'T BREATHE A SIGH OF RELIEF AFTER HIS WORDS [ale nie odetchnąłem z ulgą po jego słowach]. Then I took two weeks off to forget about this unpleasant accident.
na samej górze "... TO ANOTHER."
dziekuje bardzo:)

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