list informacyjny - sprawdzenie

Witam. Mam do napisania list informacyjny na jutro no i wymyśliłem takie coś.

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Hi Mrs Y,

I write to you because, I want invite you to my party in my new own house. Of course the party is for the occasion buying a new home. House is on xxxx Street 7/b - beautiful place, house too is brilliant. Party start about 19. So .. did you come ? Of course you can come with someone. Oh yes ! And if you can get with us some glasses - i I would be grateful.

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I jak?

I write to you because, I want TO invite you to 'my' A party in my 'new own' (own new) house. Of course the party is for the occasion OF buying a new home. THE house is on xxxx Street NO. 7/b - A beautiful place, house too is brilliant. Party startS about 19. So .. 'did' CAN you come ? Of course you can come with 'someone' (mozna 'a guest'). Oh yes ! And if you can 'get' BRING with 'us' YOU some glasses - I would be grateful.

Czyli pierwsze zdanie powinno brzmieć : I write to you because, I want to invite you to a party in my own new house?

OK już czaje. Dzięki za pomoc!

przecinek niepotrzebny

Nie uzywa sie housewarming party in BrE?

I guess not:)