Rozprawka- proszę o sprawdzenie

Witam :)
Moim zadaniem było napisanie pracy na temat plusów i minusów używania telefonów komórkowych. Póki co, zajęłam się plusami. Uprzejmię proszę o korektę, a zapewne bardzo przyda się mojej pracy. :)
Z góry dziękuję.



Nowadays, mobile phones have become the most popular way of comunication. I think that everthing has good and bad side. And there is no exception when it comes to mobile phones. The advantages of using mobile phones are very considerable, but beside those benefits, there are some disadvantages and I will try to present these in my presentation.

The first advantage of using mobile phone is that we have a contact with ours families. I think that this is the most important reason why parents buy mobile phones for theyre children. They musn't be afraid for they children, because in every moment they can take a receiver and call to a child.

moreover, when something will be wrong, for example we will be a witness of the accident, we could always call to police or the proper services. We musn't pay for this service, because a phone call with police, emergency, fire brigade, etc. ist free.

Another benefit of using mobile phones is the result of multitaske of phones. I'm sure that a mobile phone ist a great alarm clock for milions of people. Moreover, I think that for many people phone is a nice calendar and a schedule. Nowadays, phones have many, great and useful functions. We musn't have a camera in order to doing a beautiful photos. We have a possibility be in possesion of small, multitask appliance, which make it easier our life.

Nowadays, mobile phones have become the most popular way of
comMunication. I think that everYthing has A good and A bad side (mozna tez powiedziec: a positive and a negative aspect).
The advantages of using mobile phones are very considerable, (ale gdzies musisz napisac jakie one sa) but beside 'those' THESE benefits, there are some 'disadvantages' (jak uzylas benefits to lepiej pasuje -drawbacks), and I will try to present these in my presentation.

Unfotunetelly,using mobile phones have some bad sides.
First of all disadvantages is fact, that mobile phones cost a lot. Although, operatos offer convinient conditions and difrent promotions, the mobile phone is additional expense. Nowadays, always is that everyone of family have own a mobile phone, and than expenses increase, for example, at 400%.

Another disadvantages of using mobile phones is that the doctors state, that phones are harmful for an oraganism. Apparently, an hour phone call raise ourpressure for 20%.

Moreover, mobile phones have may impact on our image. Sometimes people don't switch off phones and , for example, on performance a melody ring out.


To sum it up: these are only a few examples of advantages and disadvantages of using mobile phones. Although, I can see clearly all disadvantages of mobile phones, I have to confirm that nowadays it is really hard to do without it.


Bardzo proszę o sprawdzenie całej pracy. Z góry uprzejmie dziękuję. :)

Nie otrzymałam odpowiedzi. Bardzo proszę, czy ktoś może mi pomóc?

The first advantage of using 'A' mobile phone is that we have 'a' (niepotr) contact with 'ours' OUR (przeczytaj o uzyciu tego slowa) families. I think that this is the most important reason why parents buy mobile phones for 'theyre' (zle slowo- tutaj THEIR) children. They 'musn't be' (zle pojecie - przeczytaj o tym dokladnie tutaj...DO NOT HAVE TO BE) afraid for 'they' THEIR children, because 'in' AT every moment they can take a receiver and call to 'a' (to znaczy inne dzieci tez - nie, tutaj THEIR) child.

Moreover, when something 'will be' GOES wrong, for example we 'will be' ARE a
witness of 'the' AN accident, we 'could' (could - to znaczy mozesz, ale nie musisz - lepiej CAN) always call 'to' THE police or the proper services. We 'musn't pay' DO NOT (mozna don't)PAY for this service, because a phone call with THE police, emergency, fire brigade, 'etc' (a co? albo kto? jest tym etc?-prosze tego nie robic-czy ja mam sie domyslac) 'ist' IS free.

Another benefit of using mobile phones is the result of 'multitaske' (zle slowo - tutaj moze MULTITASKING- ale moze functions pasuje) of
phones. I'm sure that a mobile phone 'ist' IS a great alarm clock for
milLions of people. Moreover, I think that for many people THE/A phone is a
nice calendar and a schedule.
We 'musn't have' (prosze jeszcze raz przeczytac o uzywaniu tego- robisz to prosto z polskiego-a wychodzi calkowicie cos innego) DO NOT HAVE TO OWN a camera in order to 'doing' TAKE 'a' (a nie uzywamy przed l. mn) beautiful photos. We have 'a' THE possibility TO be in possesion of A small,
multitask appliance, which 'make' (ale appliance to jest 'it', a 'it' to 3os.l.poj - tutaj MAKES) 'it easier our life' (nie - to nie gram. - tutaj OUR LIVES EASIER.

Dopiero zauwazylam, ze wyslales to o 5tej rano - niestety, wtedy ludzie generalnie spia - nie mozna oczekiwac pomocy 24/7.

'Unfotunetelly' (ortog), using mobile phones 'have' HAS some bad sides.
First of all disadvantages is THE fact, that mobile phones cost a lot (a lot of czego? paper, sweets,-mam zgadywac). Although, THE 'operatos' (ortog) offer 'convinient' (ortog) conditions and 'difrent' (ortog) promotions, the mobile phone is AN additional expense. Nowadays, 'always is that' (niepotr-calkowicie zmienia zdanie-i to wyglada nie za bardzo) everyone 'of' IN A family 'have' HAS ownS ('has' albo 'owns'- tutaj to samo znaczenie) a mobile phone, and 'than' THE expenses increase, for example, at 400%.

Another disadvantages of using mobile phones is that the doctors state, that phones are harmful for an 'oraganism' (ortog). Apparently, 'an hour phone call' (lepiej...a phone call lasting an hour) CAN raise our BLOOD pressure 'for' BY 20%.

Moreover, mobile phones have may AN impact on our image. Sometimes people don't switch off THEIR phones and, for example, 'on' AT (theatre) performance a melody WILL ring out. (No bo ci nigdy nie byli uczeni dobrych manierow-i szacunku dla drugiego czlowieka)

Dziękuję Ci. :)
Nie oczekaiwałam tego. Wysłałam pracę o 21. Przed pójściem do szkoły chciałam po prostu poprosić raz jeszcze.
Dziękuję za pomoc i proszę wybaczyć, jeśli kogoś uraziłam.