list prywatny -> prośba o sprawdzenie

Witam
moim zadaniem bylo napisanie listu na temat:
Napisz list do kolegi/koleżanki z Irlandii, żeby opowiedzieć o nowym chłopaku/dziewczynie kogoś z grona waszych wspólnych przyjaciół.
- podziel się nowiną i powiedz gdzie para sie poznala
- podaj przynajmniej dwie cechy wyglądu opisywanej osoby
- podaj przynajmniej jedna ceche jego/jej charakteru popartą przykładem
- wyraź swoja opinie na temat nowego zwiazku i zapytaj klege/kolezanke o zdanie.

Dear Jony
It was nice to hear from you after such. How I wonder if you remember Ann, which going with us to highschool?
I’m writing to tell you about her and her new boyfriend. It was for us snug shock, because she was declared single. Anyway she’s now very happy with Marco, that’s his name.
They have been met completely accidentally. She begun work at by the same sportshop what he work and they to catch oneself fancy. Marco is handsome and well-built man. He have brown eye and he’s dark-haired man. He’ fall in love in Ann (na zabój)

It was nice to hear from you after such (ale 'after such' what?- musisz dokonczyc). How I wonder if you remember Ann, 'which' (jak o ludziach to WHO) 'going' WENT with us to high school?
It was for us 'snug' (nie rozumiem co to slowo tutaj robi?) shock, because she was declared single.
They 'have been' (niepotr) met completely accidentally. She begAn work at 'by' (niepotr) the same sportshop 'what' (nie, - tutaj THAT he workED IN and they 'to catch oneself fancy' (nie, nie - napisz...started to fancy each other). Marco is A handsome and A well-built man. 'He have' (ej? *he have - ale przeciez 'he' to 3os.l.poj wtedy cos dodajemy) brown eyeS and he's dark-haired. (man-niepotr). He'S fallEN in love in Ann (na zabój)...pomyslimy o tym
He behaves 'as' LIKE A genuine gentleman. 'On' AT THE meeting, in which Ann presentED 'for us' (nie w tym miejscu) Marco TO US, he 'put from' (niepotr) BOUGHT US all drinks. I 'enjoy' (nie, nie to slowo tutaj...AM HAPPY) that Ann HAS 'find' FOUND-czas przeszly) somebody. 'oneself' (nie uzywaj tego - tutaj niepotr). They 'build' SEEM LIKE A harmonious couple.