List motywacyjny:)- proszę o sprawdzenie!;)

Hej:) mam prośbę:) czy mógłby mi ktoś sprawdzić czy mój list jest poprawnie napisany i nie posiada żadnych błędów?:) Proszę!:)

Dear Sir/ Madam

I am writing with regard to your scholarship. I would like to apply for it. I was told about your scholarship in the Internet.

I graduated from Jagiellonia University in Cracow with distinction. I studied at the faculty of English language. I hold a Master Degree.

I have excellent English writing and speaking skills.
For the last year I have been working in travel agency. I have been interested in Scotland's culture and history since I was there first time. I think this country is interesting and wonderfull.

I feel I am suitable candidate for this scholraship , because in my future I would like to live in Scotland, so I would like to improve my knowledge about Scotland and my English speaking skills.
I am hard-working and ambitious which makes me an ideal candidate for this scholarschip.

I look forward to hearing from you.
Yours faithfully,
XYZ

Naprawdę bardzo proszę o pomoc! Jest mi to bardzo potrzebne!:)

Dear Sir/ Madam,

I am writing with regard to 'your scholarship' (moze lepiej napisz ktorego, bo nawet jak maja tylko jeden to wypada napisac o co chodzi).
I was 'told' (z tgo co wiem, Intrnet nie mowi, tqm mozna cos przeczytac...tutaj I READ about...) about your scholarship 'in' ON the Internet.

'I graduated from THE JagielloniaN University in Cracow with distinction.
I studied at the faculty of English language. I hold a Master Degree.' (ja bym to zrobila inaczej...I graduated with a Master's Degree in English Language from the Jagiellonian University in Krakow)

For the 'last' PAST year I have been working in A travel agency. I have been interested in Scotland's culture and history since I was there FOR THE first
time (ale kiedy to bylo? wczorj, rok temu, 20 lat temu - napisz).
I think THAT this country is interesting and 'wonderfull' (ortog).

I feel I am A suitable candidate for this 'scholraship' (ortog), because in 'my' THE future I would like to live in Scotland, so I would like to improve my knowledge about Scotland and my English speaking skills. (ale wczesniej napisalas ze juz masz 'excellent speaking skills' - cos tu nie tak)